Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
In the age where countless people are succumbing to work pressures, often culminating into suicides, it wouldn't be wrong to point fingers at the stressful work environments that the modern world has gifted us with. In face of this, the popular adage to "follow your dreams" is a wise way to go. In fact, it would be beneficial for the society at large if we can foster such ideas right from childhood.
Given the fact that suicide from work stress plagues countries across the globe, the onus for such provoking people to such a great extent certainly rests on the work pressure. And considering that we spend nearly one-third of our day in offices, slogging to meet the deadlines and striking deals, it may very well be assumed that our work starts to define our lives and even our nature. A stressful work environment may often percolate into a surly temperament or even depressive tendencies. More so, the manner in which we interact with others, the choices we make in our lives are also often controlled by our work environment. Thus, when we realise the phenomenal affect our work exerts on our daily lives, it is certainly a well guided idea to follow our dreams and spend our lives working on something we really love and truly believe in.
Following one's dreams allows oneself to avoid the work-burnout, and subsequently results in lower burden on the healthcare infrastructure which is already burdened by increasing patients plagued by other non-stress related conditions. Further, doing what we love is not just about evading stress, but also about leading more meaningful lives where we can believe that our every effort towards our work is a step towards a more fulfilling life. Thus, in many cases, pursuing our dreams is also about feeling complete at even the spiritual level. In addition, a happy person will also be more productive, subsequently contributing more towards the economy. This may serve to be greatly advantageous for the developing and the under-developed nations, which are striving to meet a minimal level of development, reflective of national prosperity. Further, the worthiness of any goal is defined by the individual themselves and not the society.
Though such advice to follow one's dream is always given in a good stead, it however at times may not really give the desirable results. This is specifically in case in which people's dreams, though may be selfish, are also destructive to the society. Such may be the case of drug cartel runners, traffickers or terrorists who blinded by their vices, push their dreams to become morally corrupt and a challenge for the society. But, here also, it is important to examine the claim that whether it is dreams to become rich which are selfish or is it the circumstances in which they are raised compels them to move towards a destructive path? A general analysis indicates that human nature is mouldable and the negative tendencies in human behaviour is circumstantial, resulting again fro stressful environments. This brings us full circle to major contributor of stress, which turns out to be our work, or our parents work or the work performed by the people we live with.
Therefore, in an effort to lead happier and fruitful lives, it would be advantageous for the society at large to follow their dreams in order to avoid stress (since stress is the major contributor to everything not right in this ephemeral human life).
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...es, often culminating into suicides, it wouldnt be wrong to point fingers at the stress...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... your dreams' is a wise way to go. In fact, it would be beneficial for the so...
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Message: You used an adverb ('surly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('temperament') instead of another adjective.
...rk environment may often percolate into a surly temperament or even depressive tendencies. More so,...
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Line 3, column 727, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erts on our daily lives, it is certainly a well guided idea to follow our dreams ...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ociety. Though such advice to follow ones dream is always given in a good stead, ...
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Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...iour is circumstantial, resulting again fro stressful environments. This brings us ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, third, thus, well, in addition, in fact, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2860.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97391304348 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81088136788 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504347826087 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 888.3 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.102661047 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.19047619 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.380952381 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184450188725 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646126477932 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550384296163 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108927143905 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517671372583 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.