Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Major cities are important centers of each country. They are more influential and beneficial rather than small cities. Some people believe that providing financial support for major cities should be government’s priority if it want the country to thrive; others disagree. In my view, the major cities not only are generating the nation’s cultural traditions but also can preserve and extend them.
First, the universities which are vital source generating new cultural traditions. In most of countries, the most prestigious universities are placed in major cities. For example, the city Tehran has five big universities. Young people from all around the country come to these cities each year in order to study, then, after graduating, they will return to their cities. These people will transfer new cultures to the areas they already lived. Therefore, the generated traditions in universities will be distributed effectively.
Second, a major city is a good paragon for small cities and villages. If they establish a new custom, other cities will follow them instantly. If the country wants to create a new method such as how to consume electricity well, it should put its effort on major cities because it would be more effective. The government just must persuade people living in these cities, then, people living in other cities follow them.
In addition, the important cities of each country are the economic and cultural centers of that country. It is better to pay more attention to these centers rather than other areas. For examples, there are many big factories producing major needs of all people around the country in the cities Isfahan and Mashhad. These products will be distributed in the country and some of them will export. Therefore, if the government primarily try to support the financial needs of these areas, it is helping other areas as well.
In sum, some people may think that the government must support all areas at the same time, but I think that the government should primarily pay attention to its important centers. Not only this will be beneficial to the all country but it would be more influential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wants'?
Suggestion: wants
...uld be government's priority if it want the country to thrive; others disagree....
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the countries') or simply say ''most countries''.
Suggestion: most of the countries; most countries
... generating new cultural traditions. In most of countries, the most prestigious universities are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17663817664 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71657762547 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45584045584 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7371616707 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5238095238 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310519215157 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965400349863 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713023524721 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187872619484 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08967885611 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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