Claim: Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience.
Reason:People who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible without the constraints of established habits and attitudes.
The claim asserts that imagination is more valuable wealth than experience in that without the constraint of established habits and attitudes, people are more free to imagine. I concede that the reason stands to some ground, but the assumption which the conclusion based on is under question and thereby undermine its critical point.
As is acknowledged by all, experiences could form a stereotype of thinking ,restraining people’s range of minds by preconceived regulations. Compared to the older people, the young are more likely to take risky actions and make innovations. For example, Marc Zuckerberg established facebook at college and becomes a billionaire at his thirties, John Nash founded the theory of Nash equilibrium at his twenties. Many great people won the applause of the whole world by virtue of their evolutionary ideas, which are often hard for those middle-aged to come up with. Many reasons may account for this phenomenon, while the incorrigible habits and formulated thinking mode are certainly indispensable factors.
However, experiences work more practically in most people’s lifetime. Only after you experience numerous ups and downs in your life can you keep calm towards whatever happen to you. In addition ,people’s wisdom possibly comes more from experiences rather than empty imagination, especially for those who are good at summarizing them. The old may learn a lot from their past glories as well as failures, after they retired, they retrospect back their ways and figure out some principles or laws of life---all that become a valuable wealth which is more, at least the same as the imagination may contribute to human’s progress.
Some may argue that experiences do more harm because they constrain people’s minds and spurn potential innovations. Indeed, some experiences taught the older people to stop probing into one question since it seems useless, while the fact sometimes proves quite the opposite. However, we could not thus undermine its value; without the former experiences, it is more difficult for us to keep on seeking right answers. Even the great genius, Einstein, established the relativity theory based on the experiences of the earlier scientists such as Newton. As a matter of fact, experiences, whether or not from others or ourselves, serve better to pave the way for new discoveries and innovations instead of stifling them. Great minds are edified, not constrained by those experiences.
In sum, the claim may be too assertive to attach more importance on the function of imagination, despite that it is true that the defects of experiences sometimes negate the benefits of imagination. Nevertheless, most time experience overweight imagination, taking comprehensive aspects into consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...weight imagination, taking comprehensive aspects into consideration.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'at least', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'as well as', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228215767635 0.238963963785 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.143153526971 0.154291517835 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101659751037 0.0886310499679 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0663900414938 0.0506014161523 131% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0477178423237 0.0449626384858 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134854771784 0.123526278965 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0290456431535 0.0379742944744 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.02095824804 2.82910677849 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0228215767635 0.0316879551592 72% => OK
Particles: 0.00414937759336 0.0014075125626 295% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0933609958506 0.0950106342287 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0165975103734 0.0245489744465 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103734439834 0.0157978311181 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2777.0 2899.98275862 96% => OK
No of words: 433.0 478.390804598 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.41339491917 6.0591788892 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.65681771538 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376443418014 0.369966551584 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.304849884527 0.285172536893 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.242494226328 0.207245337619 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.182448036952 0.136322040163 134% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02095824804 2.82910677849 107% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 234.298850575 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584295612009 0.492565540709 119% => OK
Word variations: 71.5771462019 56.8184620615 126% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 21.1264367816 90% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7894736842 23.7468607788 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6549271817 62.0618507366 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.157894737 143.81877709 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 23.7468607788 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.728815259664 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.87931034483 102% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.71264367816 91% => OK
Readability: 53.2744621369 52.2641144681 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.52419354839 1.64547068916 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388152491694 0.39480681544 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0691437191776 0.11556216369 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0480334808558 0.0736162880345 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.497189545037 0.531340600358 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158047381355 0.15197228837 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133908501593 0.158818324754 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113679306254 0.0851127212816 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.298615946264 0.388921930462 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0276983770775 0.0677916285025 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264674327794 0.28015025965 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104310003832 0.0610219844235 171% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.8591954023 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30459770115 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.96264367816 40% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.10632183908 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.93390804598 127% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.04597701149 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 15.0862068966 80% => OK
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Rates: 75.33 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 4.5 Out of 6