Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Time Limit: 30 mins
When we were children, we were told that once we grow up we can be anything we want. To have the institute we choose to attend to achieve this dream attempt to dissuade us from it would be a slap in the face of that notion. The right to choose your path in life is yours to make and yours alone regardless of how difficult of a path that may be. Once leaving the basic schooling systems of elementary and high school level education, the hand holding stage of life is over and students should be making choices on their own as free thinking adults. The responsibility to pursue a field of study that is attainable and fruitful is up to the student and the student alone.
No institute of higher learning should be attempting to sway the decisions that students are making concerning their own lives. Especially if that student is indebting themselves in order to attend that institute. If all students took the easy and safe path in their education then many of societies major advances would have never been made. If Bill Gates chose to study finance because his institution persuaded him into a different and easier path then we could easily still be using pen and paper as our only medium of communication and learning as opposed to wonders personal computers have provided us. Our futures are our’s to decide and no institute to attempt to stop that.
On the other hand many may argue that it is for the betterment of society as a whole that these institutes steer students into a field that they will be able to succeed in so that they can be a contributing member to society. However, these students are no longer children. They are fully capable and functioning adults. They should no longer be caudeled and babied into taking the safe choice or only persuing what others are saying is best for them. They need to learn and succeed and fail on their own. If we applied the logic of choosing the safe and easy path for everyone, then our society would become unable to think and make critical decisions on its own once that time came. This would leave our students and future leaders illequiped with the basic abilities to think and choose freely on their own.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: YOUR_S[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our' or 'ours'?
Suggestion: our; ours
...uters have provided us. Our futures are our’s to decide and no institute to attempt t...
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Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...empt to stop that. On the other hand many may argue that it is for the betterment of ...
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Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat others are saying is best for them. They need to learn and succeed and fail on t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.190243902439 0.238963963785 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.2 0.154291517835 130% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878048780488 0.0886310499679 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536585365854 0.0506014161523 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0780487804878 0.0449626384858 174% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117073170732 0.123526278965 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0512195121951 0.0379742944744 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.41636766246 2.82910677849 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0487804878049 0.0316879551592 154% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0014075125626 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0829268292683 0.0950106342287 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0317073170732 0.0245489744465 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121951219512 0.0157978311181 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2174.0 2899.98275862 75% => OK
No of words: 389.0 478.390804598 81% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58868894602 6.0591788892 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.65681771538 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.287917737789 0.369966551584 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.20822622108 0.285172536893 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.141388174807 0.207245337619 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0874035989717 0.136322040163 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41636766246 2.82910677849 85% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 234.298850575 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506426735219 0.492565540709 103% => OK
Word variations: 55.199645942 56.8184620615 97% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 21.1264367816 80% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8823529412 23.7468607788 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3071148115 62.0618507366 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.882352941 143.81877709 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 23.7468607788 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.728815259664 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.87931034483 61% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.71264367816 39% => OK
Readability: 43.7049750491 52.2641144681 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.08088235294 1.64547068916 66% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320062076032 0.39480681544 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135800986172 0.11556216369 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0425283457249 0.0736162880345 58% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.482049835612 0.531340600358 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119687246857 0.15197228837 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137558129609 0.158818324754 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687266026625 0.0851127212816 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.462777087606 0.388921930462 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0140810530703 0.0677916285025 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257522110524 0.28015025965 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163495241997 0.0610219844235 27% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.8591954023 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30459770115 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.96264367816 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.10632183908 99% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.93390804598 127% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.04597701149 33% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 15.0862068966 93% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 3.0 Out of 6