Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study prepare them for lucrative careers.
Educational institutions should not actively encourage their students to choose fields of study prepare them for lucrative careers. The essence of education is to teach students to think for themselves. They should inform students in adequate amount and leave the decision for themselves, but they can’t maneuver the information and mislead students. Disturbing someone else’s future plan is generally immoral, especially for educational institute. In addition, this statement underlying that there is someone or a committee who are omniscient or infallible that they are able to decide which careers are more valuable than the others, but there are no such person or committee that knows everything. In addition, we know the industry is changing all the time, what if the careers which the institutions suggest become atrophied.
The essence of education to teach student to learn or think for themselves. The educational institutions can offer them information of the industries, and leave students the deciding roles. In this way students will have a sense of varieties of industries, and on this basis, it is easier for them to dig out more information themselves whether to use Google or some other approaches. However, it is critically immoral and not liable for an educator to encourage students to choose certain kind of field, even if he or she does this out of their virtue. For educators, they are in responsibility to enlighten their students, and make them well-informed, but surely not to encourage or teach them to earn money. What if a student take the advise and enter certain job market, and turns out that he or she is not of any interest in this field? No one can determine what is suitable for others, only themselves can.
No one can evaluate which kind of knowledge is more valuable than others. It is possible to evaluate market value of an industry, but knowledge itself can not be determined. Can you say the value of knowledge about a volcano is less profitable than the value of medicine? Of course you can’t, even if the the volcano knowledge can’t really make any money in this time, but it might save great amount of lives and properties in the future. Therefor, if you can’t judge or predict which job market will be lucrative all the time, better not to give advise.
The encouragement might lead to a collective will that most people squeeze into the same occupation. Herd behavior tells us that the ship will follow whatever the leader ship do, if the leader ship drop from the cliff, the rest will just follow and result in collective suicide, meaning that under not well-informed situation, the rest of people will just follow what other people do, and create a sense of collective will to the same direction. If all students take the advise, and enter the same job market, the result would disastrous. Because the certain field of job market is limited, if more people are entering the same job market, lots of them might be surprised that the market is saturated and are not able to find any position. In addition, the revenue of a field has its limitation as well, if more people are in the same field, the revenue will be shared and result in devaluation of a certain job market making it not as profitable as usual.
To sum up, there are lots of reasons to oppose the statement. The primary one is that it violates the virtue of education, because it shouldn’t be its goal that education to teach students to be mercenary and it is also literally irresponsible for that himself or herself couldn’t assure its development in the future. Besides that, it is generally impossible to appraise the value of the knowledge or the careers in the future. Even if you do find a convincing reason, as more people entering that market, the market will be shared and making it less lucrative or setting higher barrier to enter a company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 679, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'committees'?
Suggestion: committees
...others, but there are no such person or committee that knows everything. In addition, we ...
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Line 4, column 735, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...m to earn money. What if a student take the advise and enter certain job market, and turns...
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Line 4, column 739, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
... earn money. What if a student take the advise and enter certain job market, and turns...
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Line 6, column 307, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...cine? Of course you can't, even if the the volcano knowledge can't really mak...
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Line 6, column 307, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...cine? Of course you can't, even if the the volcano knowledge can't really mak...
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Line 6, column 563, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...rative all the time, better not to give advise. The encouragement might lead to a c...
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Line 8, column 468, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...he same direction. If all students take the advise, and enter the same job market, the res...
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Line 8, column 472, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...ame direction. If all students take the advise, and enter the same job market, the res...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, really, so, well, in addition, kind of, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3258.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 662.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92145015106 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07241172033 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78963556962 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400302114804 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1042.2 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1566152656 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.666666667 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5185185185 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293613805509 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989023470195 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189268751228 0.0758088955206 250% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167351021727 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158476737954 0.0667264976115 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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