Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.

The claim that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to pursue fields of study which would lead to lucrative careers is actually two-fold: 1) Students should choose their major based on its job prospect and 2) Educational institutions should step in when students are making that choice. I found both claims problematic.

Concerning the first claim, I concede that job prospect should be taken into consideration when a student makes the often once-in-a-lifetime choice, especially in an increasingly competitive society like today’s. For occupational education, basing the choice on career prospect is quite legit; while for universities that aim at cultivating professional talents, assuming that higher education is solely for pragmatic purposes goes against the very nature of education, which is to enlighten and to fulfill. Students should therefore consider whether the field of study they choose attracts them, makes them more intellectually engaged and ultimately makes them more enlightened men while contributing to the society based on what they have learned.

Thus, students should mainly take their talents and interests into consideration when choosing their field of study, which job prospect as a supplement. The renowned movie “3 Idiots”, which depicts the college life of several students from the most prestigious engineer school in India have shed light to this problem. The protagonist Farham has been drawn to photography and wildlife since his childhood, but his despot-like father insisted that Farham should become an engineer, the highest paid job in India. Farham followed his father’s will but struggled in college with passing grades and tremendous mental stress. Although a happy ending is granted in Bollywood movies where Farham stood up to his father and pursued his dream, in real life, this could be the end of the story. One famous quote from this movie says “Go for excellency, and success would come to you.” For young students who haven’t figured out about their lives, going for money and fame seems like the quick and easy answer, yet often the alternative turns out to be the road to happiness and fulfillment.

Concerning the second claim that educational institutions have a say in students’ choice, I have to strongly disagree. It is the student’s freedom to do whatever they want to do with their lives, although institutions can provide guidelines and information. There should be a fine line between “actively encourage”, as in the claim, and imposing ideas on students. However, in practice, the line could too delicate to tell. To what level can and should an educational institutions encourage its students to make particular life choices? And how would they do that? By instilling ideas without the students’ notice, or by “mentoring” them into believing the values held by the institution? Either way seems like a violation to student’s freedom, and they both go far beyond the limit of an educational institution’s responsibilities.

In sum, I strongly disagree with the claim that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to pursue fields of study which would lead to lucrative careers. Although students should take job prospect into some consideration when choosing their field of study, and educational institutions may provide certain guild and information when they are making this choice, ultimately, students should put their talents and interest in the first place, while educational institutions should never step over the line and interfere with their choice.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 489, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'institution'?
Suggestion: institution
...hat level can and should an educational institutions encourage its students to make particul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3114.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59066427289 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19990845931 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504488330341 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 935.1 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.0779238269 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.285714286 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5238095238 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406173879663 0.243740707755 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121466440571 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131587587535 0.0758088955206 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274731060693 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132604455295 0.0667264976115 199% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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