The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument seems convincing, but it is contingent on certain assumptions like the no eligibility criteria or auditions for the incoming students is something that parents will consider while enrolling their children to a school, offering a wide range of courses is a more convincing factor than offering few courses with great depth and finally, the year of establishment of this school is not stated but the the number of mozart graduates that have become well-known and highly paid professionals is stated as a note worthy point.
Most parents consider it a prestige to enter their children in schools that have a stringent admission processes. It is often considered as a significant factor to judge a school's merit. The argument states as a good point that there is no audition or critera for the students who wish to enroll in their school, but having no criteria can invite students whose skills are below average, this can inturn reduce the overall quality of education in the school as professors tend to adapt according the students of his or her class. Hence, if this is the case, then the author's assumption that this school should be the first choice for parents considering to enroll their child in music, will be false.
The argument states that the school offers instruction in a wide range of styles, but it is not stated if any of these styles are taught with a well formed curriculum or if these courses had a high success rate in the past. This is significant as the success rate of a school is considered to be a more significant factor than the range of courses they offer as parents who consider enrolling their child in a music school, aims for them to become professional musicians. Hence, the assumption that a wide range of courses can attract the parents will be false, if the courses have no prominent success rate.
The argument also states that many graduates from the school have become well-known and highly paid professional musicians, but it is not certain if these students are from different batches or this number is obtained by considering all the batches. This is significant as if the number of students who became successfull is consistent every year, then the argument's assumption that this point will attract parents will be true but if this number is obtained from just some of the batches then the argument's will be false as then it may not be the school's efforts that made those students successful, it might be due to their skill that they had even before joining the school.
Also, the percentage of the students who became successful matters as if the percentage is low, it means that the number of students enrolled is not commensurate with the number of successful students. This indicates that the school's success rate is low. If this is the case, then the author's claim that many Mozart graduates have become professionals, will do more bad than good.
Hence, the above points needs to be elucidated in order to evaluate the argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...shment of this school is not stated but the the number of mozart graduates that have be...
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Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...shment of this school is not stated but the the number of mozart graduates that have be...
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Line 1, column 516, Rule ID: NOTE_WORTHY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'noteworthy'?
Suggestion: noteworthy
...ighly paid professionals is stated as a note worthy point. Most parents consider it a pres...
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Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...s. Hence, if this is the case, then the authors assumption that this school should be t...
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Line 2, column 642, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considering enrolling'.
Suggestion: considering enrolling
... should be the first choice for parents considering to enroll their child in music, will be false. T...
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Line 4, column 357, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...full is consistent every year, then the arguments assumption that this point will attract...
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Line 4, column 469, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ut if this number is obtained from just some of the batches then the arguments will be fals...
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Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ssful students. This indicates that the schools success rate is low. If this is the cas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, then, well, while, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83820662768 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66159618485 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.395711500975 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.296594071 60.3974514979 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.285714286 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.6428571429 23.4991977007 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253213363406 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107483326513 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864270457658 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13270064368 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825589455792 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.8420337079 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.8971910112 227% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.7820224719 229% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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