Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
A formal education is a highly valued commodity in the modern era. It is a commodity deired by persepctive employers, significant others, family, and self. The question that begs to be asked is whether formal education is stifling our minds and spirits or does it set them free? While a formal education setting is more structured than most people would prefer in order to set their minds and spirits free, I believe that this setting can surely provide an atmosphere is which the mind and spirirt can be free.
While obtaining a formal education, the classroom setting, often has many guidelines and a strict curriculum that is followed in order to adhere to university policies, but also to ensure that the class does not veer from the topic which they are supposed to learning. Having said this, many classes allow for a vast amount freedom within the broad topic that is being taught. My senior year in college, I took History of the Reformation, this class obviously was strictly covering topics within the Reformation period, but when it came time to write our final papers, we were given the autonomy to choose our own paper subject. These topics had to be approved by the professor, but we were given freedom to choose any topic within the Reformation period. This choice allowed my fellow peers and myself to set our minds and spirits on a course of learning about a topic within the Reformation period that we felt akin to.
Furthermore, the acquistion of new information is a tool that can be used, in and of iteself, to set the mind and the spirit free of the worldly constraints that may be encountered in a formal education setting. It may be true that formal education imposes demarcations which can be stifling, but that does not mean that the power of knowledge and learning to set the mind and the spirit free are lost. The classroom provides students with useful information and knowledge that allows the student to explore a subject more deeply and inquisitively in their own fashion. In every class that I take, I gain new pieces of information and knowledge that never fail to make me curious enough to either research the topic further or apply the knowledge to my personal life. After taking Health Psychology and learning about high blood pressure and the factors that can cause and sustain it, I took that information and was able to apply it to my mother’s own case and help her manage her high blood pressure. The ability to apply knowledge that I learned in a classroom setting to my personal life, to help a loved one, is not an experience that I would call restraining, it is an experience that I felt was absolutely freeing.
However, I can’t argue with the fact that the formal education atmosphere can be stifling at times and does not always allow for the freedom that the mind and the spirit demand. The strict deadlines in formal education do always give the student the time to explore certain topics as their minds and spirits may feel are necessary. The curriculum may not always leave room for the student to explore topics in the subject matter in the manner that they feel paramoun to their educational freedom and the instructors may not nuture or support their students in such a way that their students feel able and encouraged to explore their mind and spirit’s desires freely. These are all issues that could be abd probbably will be encountered by any person during their formal education journey, but that does not mean they have to allow these constraints to hold back their extra-curricular pursuits of the mind and spirirt.
While the main goal of formal education is not to set its student’s monds and spirirts free, it ceratinly provides the tools and resources necessary to do so,. It may be true that formal education can be restrictive in nature, but the opportunity to be set free through the formal education process is avaialable, the student simply has to take advantage of the opprtunities when presented.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221779548473 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.180610889774 0.157235817809 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0863213811421 0.0880659088768 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0398406374502 0.0497285424764 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0650730411687 0.0444667217837 146% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0876494023904 0.12292977631 71% => OK
Participles: 0.0398406374502 0.0406280797675 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66798352135 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0438247011952 0.030933414821 142% => OK
Particles: 0.00132802124834 0.0016655270985 80% => OK
Determiners: 0.102257636122 0.0997080785238 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239043824701 0.0249443105267 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0172642762284 0.0148568991511 116% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4003.0 2732.02544248 147% => OK
No of words: 688.0 452.878318584 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81831395349 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12149920406 4.58838876751 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329941860465 0.366273622748 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238372093023 0.280924506359 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165697674419 0.200843997647 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116279069767 0.132149295362 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66798352135 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 219.290929204 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424418604651 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.011531318 55.4138127331 96% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 32.7619047619 23.380412469 140% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5250922382 59.4972553346 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.619047619 141.124799967 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7619047619 23.380412469 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.428571428571 0.674092028746 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 56.5991140642 51.4728631049 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.22325581395 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42389062435 0.391690518653 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.190177903724 0.123202303941 154% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.099038397416 0.077325440228 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.634829121633 0.547984918172 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119949515607 0.149214159877 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208166802098 0.161403998019 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721510026736 0.0892212321368 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.473002184142 0.385218514788 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.10214724182 0.0692045440612 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319475863488 0.275328986314 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104725071787 0.0653680567796 16% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 7.22455752212 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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