It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Cities are places that a lot of citizens live and work, while rural areas definitely have less dense population. Cultural traditions of a nation can be generated in both types of areas and we cannot conclude that cities are the primary places that cultural traditions are generated and preserved. I will explain the reasons for this argument in the below essay.
First, there are a lot of a nation’s traditions that are originated from the rural areas. People in the rural areas have different life style from the urban people, so many local traditions are always found in specific rural areas. In Thailand, one of important cultural traditions is Thai foods. There are various kinds of traditional Thai foods and these foods come from every part of the country. Different parts of Thailand have different types of vegetables, fruits, and spices. Therefore, the food ingredients are varied from one place to the others and it results in the variety of Thai foods. Only the cities cannot create as many types of foods as we have today. As a result, the rural areas are the important parts in a nation’s tradition formulation.
Second, most cities do not have an abilities to preserve a nation’s traditions. Many big cities around the world such as Bangkok, Tokyo, and London comprise of people from other nations around the world. The cultures and traditions in these cities are influenced by the multinational cultures. Accordingly, it is very difficult to preserve the nation’s original tradition in big cities. For instance, Thai people have the tradition in respecting the elders and seniors. Young people have to obey the instruction of the elders, although they sometimes do not agree with them. However, people in Bangkok have a lot of opportunities to see the western cultures that one should believe in oneself if there are enough supported reasons. Consequently, most young generations in Bangkok do not follow Thai old tradition and this specific tradition is disappearing from Bangkok and other big cities in Thailand. For this reason, we cannot say that cities are the primary places to preserve nation’s traditions.
One may argue that there are various nation’s traditions in many cities because they are places that people from everywhere in a country gather together. This statement may be true but these different traditions in cities are not generated from the cities themselves. Most of them are generated from many specific rural areas in the nation and people from different areas bring them to cities. We can see many local languages in cities because people in cities come from different regions. However, these local languages are not originated in the cities. Therefore, cities are not the origins of most traditions of a nation.
All in all, cities are not the primary places that a nation’s traditions are generated and preserved. In the contrary, the rural areas are the places that generate and preserve these traditions.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Arguments are great. Sentences can be polished.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2412 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.963 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.536 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an ability' or simply 'abilities'?
Suggestion: an ability; abilities
...on. Second, most cities do not have an abilities to preserve a nation's traditions....
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...orld such as Bangkok, Tokyo, and London comprise of people from other nations around the wo...
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Line 5, column 1019, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to preserve nation's traditions. One may argue that there are various nat...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273851590106 0.240241500013 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.123674911661 0.157235817809 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111307420495 0.0880659088768 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0441696113074 0.0497285424764 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0247349823322 0.0444667217837 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13074204947 0.12292977631 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0247349823322 0.0406280797675 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80543162067 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0123674911661 0.030933414821 40% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100706713781 0.0997080785238 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0159010600707 0.0249443105267 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00530035335689 0.0148568991511 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2999.0 2732.02544248 110% => OK
No of words: 486.0 452.878318584 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.170781893 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384773662551 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271604938272 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207818930041 0.200843997647 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152263374486 0.132149295362 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80543162067 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 219.290929204 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.374485596708 0.48968727796 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.9798009564 55.4138127331 76% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.3571428571 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5723981752 59.4972553346 53% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.107142857 141.124799967 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3571428571 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 44.5176366843 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 2.22935779817 1.64882698954 135% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423935069586 0.391690518653 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15253074849 0.123202303941 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0871503485594 0.077325440228 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528366710077 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127165530275 0.149214159877 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186355466368 0.161403998019 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764343140643 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.485071256291 0.385218514788 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0173700767741 0.0692045440612 25% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334290592847 0.275328986314 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430716423851 0.0653680567796 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88274336283 328% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 15.0 2.70907079646 554% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 27.0 13.5995575221 199% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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