The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.
As we are born and grown in different nation, we have different ethnicity, nationality. Just as all people on earth has different nationality, there are millions or billions of historical fact that will afford people a lesson. The statement claims that main reason of history is to disprove illusion that people living present is different from people who lived in earlier era. This claim fundamentally does not accounts that how history is crucial to human history. If we learn people who lived in previous era and circumstances which that has influential impact, we could deal with a problem and protect from it. Further, main benefit of studying history is to understand basic human experiences.
First and foremost, one crucial benefit from learning a history is to protect the same mistakes. Germany made a World War 2, and they still regret what they did to Jewish people. During World War 2, Nazi made one of extreme detrimental genocide called Holocaust to Jewish people; he made oratory to curse Jewish people and made prosecution of Jews. We still remember what happened in the past, and we have to understand and learn because problem of future can be appeared.
Moreover, the main benefit of studying history is to understand human experience. For instance, science has experiment, and scientists make an hundred or thousand times of trial including many errors. In human society, when people live in a different society, they have disparate experiences. Further, histories can show that people who lived in earlier era have fundamentally different experiences. Therefore, since we have different characteristics, we can understand history as disparate experiences as whole human experiences.
In closing, statement claims history shows disproving that people living in present and people living in previous era are different. However, history is the objective manner to protect the same mistakes that had been happened in the past. Further, as we grow in a different society, and nation, we have to learn more about many different type of society from history because history includes human experiences in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...ons of historical fact that will afford people a lesson. The statement claims that mai...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'account'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: account
... era. This claim fundamentally does not accounts that how history is crucial to human hi...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'account'
Suggestion: account
... era. This claim fundamentally does not accounts that how history is crucial to human hi...
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Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...s crucial to human history. If we learn people who lived in previous era and circumsta...
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Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nce has experiment, and scientists make an hundred or thousand times of trial incl...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...ment, and scientists make an hundred or thousand times of trial including many errors. I...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...and nation, we have to learn more about many different type of society from history because hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27565982405 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84560249899 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472140762463 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.5430277348 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.9444444444 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387460615061 0.243740707755 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140818771668 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139297524268 0.0758088955206 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260009255455 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13560217314 0.0667264976115 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.