Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is a known fact, that mass media and the internet have casued population's attention span to get shorter. Some people claim that this peril is mitigated with a better ability of sorting a vast amount of data. Nevertheless, the effects of losing focos, are by far supressing the benefit of this new ability. Hence, the problem of undermining attention should be addrressed imediatly by responsible authorities and the internet's content makers.
First, it might seem that the effect of shorter attention span is harmless, and natural like at one day smoking was. Human is an adaptive creature and we have tendecy to adapt to change very quickly and realize their long term effects much later. In that sence, there might be some more effects of the inability to focus. For example teachers today report it is much harder to get the attention of their pupils. of course this effect is negative on the overall learning of the class and starts a feedback loop which one student with concentration deficency causing another child to loose focus, making the whole environment much more frentic and not receptive for learning.
Secondly, another harsh effect off attention defeciency is that is clear that this mass media effect is causing people to become more anti-social and show less empathy. The abilty to show empathy is very important for individuals and society, and one of its main ingridients rely on the ability to understand delicate information from the person infront of them. The capacity to interpert this information rely on the ability to stay focused and not moving from one stimula to another interchangibly.
Finally, the ability to sort data has it merits, people today are genrally smarter in the classical sense. Yet, this inteligence is not enough though to make up for the social risks involved in developing individuals who are much less likely to be empathetic towards their peers.
To conclude, it is essential to understand that for a variety of reasons, namely the lessen ability to learn in social environment and the loss of empathy, the seemingly benefit of sorting through large data is just not enough to make up on the cons on the social side of the human equation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for example', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235294117647 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.154411764706 0.157235817809 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0980392156863 0.0880659088768 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0686274509804 0.0497285424764 138% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0269607843137 0.0444667217837 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107843137255 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0392156862745 0.0406280797675 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75254452238 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.046568627451 0.030933414821 151% => OK
Particles: 0.00490196078431 0.0016655270985 294% => OK
Determiners: 0.110294117647 0.0997080785238 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00735294117647 0.0249443105267 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00490196078431 0.0148568991511 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2240.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 369.0 452.878318584 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07046070461 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384823848238 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276422764228 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168021680217 0.200843997647 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119241192412 0.132149295362 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75254452238 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 219.290929204 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531165311653 0.48968727796 108% => OK
Word variations: 58.1266112494 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6194690265 73% => OK
Sentence length: 24.6 23.380412469 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0742503537 59.4972553346 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.333333333 141.124799967 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 23.380412469 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.674092028746 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 52.2422764228 51.4728631049 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.52941176471 1.64882698954 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429349851774 0.391690518653 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13254361598 0.123202303941 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0798366181638 0.077325440228 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600448915149 0.547984918172 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147217157618 0.149214159877 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190861449646 0.161403998019 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690506350687 0.0892212321368 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.38314797787 0.385218514788 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0667355885524 0.0692045440612 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292200891087 0.275328986314 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233100541562 0.0653680567796 36% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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