Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
With the morning of 21st Century came the Technology, and such technology that it outpaced our imagination and changed the world forever. Technology in form of internet, the mobile devices, smart watches and several others has made our lives to integrate seamlessly with it, making it almost an unimaginable prospect in the present time to live without technology. With the technology came mass media and internet which has succeeded to flourish and continue to grow even more, which not only has provisioned us with the the latest updates of the world but also the ability to sift the wheat from chaff.
The positive influence of technology is greatly pervasive, so much so that even the toddlers are glued to it, swiping pages upon pages on internet and watching videos on social media. Firstly, the mass media and internet has worked to enhance our cognitive abilities in sifting through volumes of data, as one becomes inured to the process of identifying the relevant information in a split-second and discarding the rest. This skill is essential for this age, where the amount of data available is humongous and requires to be filtered. More so, the sheer volume of data has presented the world with new-age jobs, that of a Data scientist, who is responsible for making sense from the unorganized data. When it is evident where the world is heading, into the age of data, this ability to find what is important instead of focusing on a single thing is the need of the hour.
Further, it may well be claimed that mass media and internet may have reduced the attention span. While this may be true, its relevance may not hold ground in the time of rapidly evolving technology. There are scientific reports that claim reduction in attention span owing to use of mass media and internet,but in all likelihood, it concerns the excessive use and not the moderate use. In fact, excess use of anything is bad be it technology or sleep, and hence it is important that we exercise caution when we depend on technology. It also wouldn't be wrong to say that attention span has reduced because we are flooded from information from all ends. But, this reduced attention span is benefiting the world, for we are required to do multiple things in the present time. The downside of reduced attention span may have been more relevant in earlier times when neither was there such volumes of data nor was there a pressure to excel. Given that the society expects an individual to do everything possible in their human capacity-from excelling in studies to sports to appearance, the technology for certain has benefited us.
To conclude, it may be more agreeable if we view mass media and internet as purveyors of salves who soothe the need of the millenials to stay connected 24x7, thereby bridging the gaps and connecting people across the globe. Further, given that the technology has made everything to happen at such rapid pace, it has also helped in evolution of mankind as more adaptive individuals with faster ability to identify the good from bad , thus enabling quicker decisions.All in all, the overall effect has been positive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2603.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 532.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89285714286 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65218350591 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501879699248 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9645816898 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.611111111 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5555555556 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232369301698 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697493330341 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419113820099 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133273916466 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165035874134 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.