A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The education authorities should provide the same course to all the 1st to 12th grader. While it can be too rigid for an education system, some benefit for the student can certainly be brought. Yet, I cannot agree with it without any condition, due to the different attributions of students.
Admittedly, the same national course can unify the general quality of education. The same textbook and the same way of teaching will, to some extent, bring the same knowledge to students. Therefore, the government authorities and the local authority that students will have occupations in the future can need not be worry about the skill that students have acquired. Also, students can connect to the national industry without any gap.
However, it can be problematic to have the same curriculum. Had the textbook and courses could not feed the industry's requirement or the education could not, it is a common problem, keep its pace on the technologic, social or international trend. A huge gap between the education and the business will appear. That is what we see today in my country, Taiwan. Students are less competitive after their graduation. Without any preparation to work for the local industry from their school works and textbooks, most of them are doing jobs that require little knowledge learned from the school. In the end, their education turns out to be useless and a waste of time and money. Despite the university education is adaptive, which is according to the student's attributions, not all of the student can have the same opportunity to enroll in a college. Had the policy that the same curriculum requirement actually had been put into action, the government authority should meticulously monitor the teaching material. Regular censorship and the meeting that is held by the education and industry authorities should be carried out.
On the other hand, student's attribution can never be the same. On top of the same curriculum, an adaptive education is needed. Due to the different extent of the absorption of the knowledge, students can be sorted to levels. By doing this, the strength of a student can be enhanced and the deficit can be amended. This kind of education system that is successful can be seen all over the world. There is a school recruiting the smartest students in the world in the US. Most of the students in the school are prodigies in any sense of the word. Gathering them and providing them with the different and adaptive teaching material is augmenting their gift and their ability.
In sum, while the unification of the quality of student can facilitate the local company, it can also be too risky to give the same national courses to the student. The benefit can be outstripped by the potential adversity. To perform the best efficiency of an education system, the unification should be aided by the adaptive curriculum
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234521575985 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.138836772983 0.157235817809 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0863039399625 0.0880659088768 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.031894934334 0.0497285424764 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.031894934334 0.0444667217837 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101313320826 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0431519699812 0.0406280797675 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79626486983 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0300187617261 0.030933414821 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00375234521576 0.0016655270985 225% => OK
Determiners: 0.151969981238 0.0997080785238 152% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.046904315197 0.0249443105267 188% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00750469043152 0.0148568991511 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2884.0 2732.02544248 106% => OK
No of words: 480.0 452.878318584 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00833333333 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.347916666667 0.366273622748 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.302083333333 0.280924506359 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225 0.200843997647 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145833333333 0.132149295362 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79626486983 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452083333333 0.48968727796 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.0359765878 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1428571429 23.380412469 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1983895621 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 141.124799967 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 23.380412469 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.674092028746 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 47.3511904762 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.87037037037 1.64882698954 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493424048557 0.391690518653 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117383055769 0.123202303941 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0802359685329 0.077325440228 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555381642543 0.547984918172 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155316337724 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.221197021846 0.161403998019 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946219280643 0.0892212321368 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.630803346611 0.385218514788 164% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0832434593117 0.0692045440612 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.386970935532 0.275328986314 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341129033524 0.0653680567796 52% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.5995575221 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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