People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making
What determines our behaviors? There are many factors contributing to our actions. As to the claim that our behavior is largely determined by forces not of ourselves, though it seems plausible to some degree, I still could not agree much with it.
First of all, people’s behaviors are a function of various forces, including our own mind and the outside forces. As a member of certain groups, it is natural that our behavior are influenced by others’ of the inference groups. For example, if our surrounding people all begin to talk about a new television programme or use new types of cellphones, we are tend to watch the programme or change our cellphones even if we are not interested in them. Since we do not want to be excluded from the circle, we are usually unconsciously simulating others. Furthermore, according to related studies, emotions could be contagious; so it is no wonder that the phenomenon caused by “herd effect” happen quite often, especially in the financial market.
However, these situations do not mean that our behaviors are totally determined by outer forces so that we could do nothing but conform with the natural trend. As the most intelligent animals( until now)in the world, we are superior than other species in that we are able to act out of our wills. If we are definite and determined enough to manage our emotions, we would not feel too anxious when others are in a panic, instead we would quickly calm down and figure out a way to resolve the problem. In addition, if all our decisions are not made by ourselves, then many people may act the same, and we lose our individual features as a result. This is quite absurd, for our world is always filled with various colors as well as opinions.
As I mentioned at the beginning, it is true that people’s behaviors are largely influenced by the social environment, but ambitious people usually have clear target in their minds when they behave something against their wills in calculation. For politicians, they have to make some compromises or perform artificially in order to achieve their political ends.It is the same in business circle. After all, people behave in a particular way due to their own wills.
Most times, the decisions are made based on a more comprehensive consideration of the situation.For example, when Roosevelt declared war against Japan after their attack on Pearl Harbour, though it may seem to be an angry reaction to their sneak raid, the America itself may not tolerant the cruel crimes they have done any longer. The victory is sure to be achieved by the justice side, just sooner or later. In this way,the declaration,which seems to be determined by stimulation from the outside, was a decision out of American people’s will inherently.
In sum, although people’s behavior is largely influenced by outer forces, we could not deny the fact that they are in fact determined by people’s own wills.As a matter of fact, it is a combination of people’s characteristics, target, courage and the specific situations.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.2082616179 0.240241500013 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.153184165232 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.07917383821 0.0880659088768 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0740103270224 0.0497285424764 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.07917383821 0.0444667217837 178% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.132530120482 0.12292977631 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0344234079174 0.0406280797675 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91187880665 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0292598967298 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.00344234079174 0.0016655270985 207% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0843373493976 0.0997080785238 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0172117039587 0.0249443105267 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00860585197935 0.0148568991511 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3066.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 513.0 452.878318584 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97660818713 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356725146199 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282651072125 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194931773879 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140350877193 0.132149295362 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91187880665 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 219.290929204 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 62.3589968658 55.4138127331 113% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.65 23.380412469 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8692860925 59.4972553346 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.3 141.124799967 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.65 23.380412469 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.674092028746 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 53.9151072125 51.4728631049 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.22471910112 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280465361402 0.391690518653 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117074538464 0.123202303941 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0460888876702 0.077325440228 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.570388062024 0.547984918172 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170288401389 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110610983509 0.161403998019 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926183272466 0.0892212321368 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.326872581101 0.385218514788 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0997074686161 0.0692045440612 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201208072782 0.275328986314 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854335866307 0.0653680567796 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
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Rates: 87.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.25 Out of 6