People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
What determines a person's behavior, has been an issue for debate for a long time. From genetic engineers to psychologist to sociologist have been trying to find the definite answer for decades. Whether it is person's surrounding factor, or his or her own decision, that shape their behavior and personality has been debated many times and still puzzles specialists. According to author, anyone's behavior is largely determined by other forces than his or her own decision making. It is difficult to response to this assertion in simple words. For me, people's own decision making has more to do.
One of the biggest enigma regarding human behavior phenomenon is 'Nature vs. Nurture'. Whether a person makes his own mark or is it determined by their environmental forces is a matter of discussion. It is true that a person's genetic factors, environment, family, privileges all play a role in building up a significant behavioral pattern. But humans are not only dependent on their environmental forces. They have been gifted with the power to reason, to understand, weigh their choices and make their own decision. If our behavior was determined by forces in spite of our choices, then we still would have been living in caves. We could not have made the choices that moved us forward, that shaped our behavior.
Even in families, where children are given the same opportunities and same privileges (which act as forces), not two siblings ever show same patterns of behavior. As much as they are influenced by those forces, their behaviors are also productions of their choices, their makings.
Take Oprah Winfrey for example. An African-American woman, born into poverty, deprived of privileges and exploited. Every force in her life was against her. But later in life she made herself into one of the most influential people in the world. If her behavior was determined bu the forces of her life, it would have been a submissive one. But she made her own choices, and possessed behavior reflecting leadership and influence.
Cunter-argument can come in a form like, Oprah is one in a million. And for everybody, it is not the same. Sure she is an exceptional. But we are all given choices infront of us either to give in to the forces or rise up or million other choices. It is those choices, those makings that help us establish our own identity.
In conclusion, it can not be denied that forces around us play a vital role in determination of our behavior. But it is hard to succumb to the notion that they play larger role than our own makings in flourishing our behavior. It is possible that our own makings play larger role than our surrounding forces, and it is those makings that determine our pattern of behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
What determines a persons behavior, has been an issue for debate ...
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...es own decision making has more to do. One of the biggest enigma regarding huma...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...a matter of discussion. It is true that a persons genetic factors, environment, family, p...
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...us forward, that shaped our behavior. Even in families, where children are giv...
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...tions of their choices, their makings. Take Oprah Winfrey for example. An Afric...
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...r reflecting leadership and influence. Cunter-argument can come in a form like...
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... and influence. Cunter-argument can come in a form like, Oprah is one in a m...
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...rybody, it is not the same. Sure she is an exceptional. But we are all given choices infront o...
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Suggestion: a million
... to give in to the forces or rise up or million other choices. It is those choices, tho...
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...at help us establish our own identity. In conclusion, it can not be denied that...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'as for', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in spite of', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222007722008 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.179536679537 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752895752896 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0328185328185 0.0497285424764 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.104247104247 0.0444667217837 234% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.1138996139 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0559845559846 0.0406280797675 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82137587424 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0250965250965 0.030933414821 81% => OK
Particles: 0.003861003861 0.0016655270985 232% => OK
Determiners: 0.0656370656371 0.0997080785238 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00965250965251 0.0249443105267 39% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011583011583 0.0148568991511 78% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2739.0 2732.02544248 100% => OK
No of words: 464.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90301724138 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331896551724 0.366273622748 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26724137931 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189655172414 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125 0.132149295362 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82137587424 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480603448276 0.48968727796 98% => OK
Word variations: 54.4624220161 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.380412469 68% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0379308695 59.4972553346 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4482758621 141.124799967 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.380412469 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.413793103448 0.674092028746 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.724137931 51.4728631049 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.23780487805 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360879817103 0.391690518653 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108137767838 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.11547928271 0.077325440228 149% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.460869987949 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148961832329 0.149214159877 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114250494167 0.161403998019 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530757393791 0.0892212321368 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.244402530756 0.385218514788 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0812703564908 0.0692045440612 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214802764517 0.275328986314 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381532179628 0.0653680567796 58% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88274336283 246% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.