Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily obsolete ways of thinking and acting because of both a high comfort level and a fear of the unknown.
A society whose people embrace positive changes will be making a good progress towards a promising future. I believe, overcoming our fears and abandoning the obsolete ways of thinking can unlock unforeseen potentials in our society.
Starting a shoe making business especially with little or no experience may first seem a daunting task. Many would prefer continue selling the kind of shoes already in the market. An entrepreneur will have to take a higher risk to invest his money and time to come up with new shoes designs, but once his designs catch the market his profit will go high because the designs will be unique – and who doesn’t want to look uniquely fashionable – the shoes will become a new trend in the market. In order to become successful, individuals in the society should be ready to take risks and overcome their fear.
The world is changing and therefore every individual should make some progress towards that change. Globalization and use of internet has integrated different parts of the world to become like one village; while countries vary in the use of technology, each country is aware of what the current technology offers. Statistical data shows that ICT has been a catalyst for development of developed countries, whereby third world countries are reluctant towards the adaption of ICT. Therefore, developing countries should abandon their fear in order to reduce the existing economic gap.
Some may argue that, old ways of doing things are better. Proponents of the idea focus on the chances of failure upon taking a new direction such as starting a new business. They consider that taking risks does not always yield positive results. However, failure is part of growing, we sometimes have to learn from our mistakes and do something better afterwards. On the other hand, one is more likely to lose more opportunities if doesn’t want try anything.
To sum up, in this ever changing world making progress is necessary and everyone should strive to make at least one step at a time to make our life better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good progress'.
Suggestion: good progress
...embrace positive changes will be making a good progress towards a promising future. I believe, ...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er to reduce the existing economic gap. Some may argue that, old ways of doing t...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... the existing economic gap. Some may argue that, old ways of doing things are bett...
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Line 4, column 465, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ties if doesn't want try anything. To sum up, in this ever changing world m...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'at least', 'kind of', 'such as', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260526315789 0.240241500013 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.184210526316 0.157235817809 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0842105263158 0.0880659088768 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0368421052632 0.0497285424764 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0315789473684 0.0444667217837 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105263157895 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0473684210526 0.0406280797675 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6727687024 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0342105263158 0.030933414821 111% => OK
Particles: 0.00526315789474 0.0016655270985 316% => OK
Determiners: 0.0947368421053 0.0997080785238 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0342105263158 0.0249443105267 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0105263157895 0.0148568991511 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2063.0 2732.02544248 76% => OK
No of words: 344.0 452.878318584 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99709302326 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357558139535 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279069767442 0.280924506359 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203488372093 0.200843997647 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113372093023 0.132149295362 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6727687024 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 219.290929204 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613372093023 0.48968727796 125% => OK
Word variations: 72.6730345965 55.4138127331 131% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5 23.380412469 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8905283545 59.4972553346 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.9375 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.380412469 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9375 0.674092028746 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 49.4069767442 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.63541666667 1.64882698954 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35579783491 0.391690518653 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0778769884116 0.123202303941 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0685806246662 0.077325440228 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518352014916 0.547984918172 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201686307393 0.149214159877 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126192888999 0.161403998019 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844094765995 0.0892212321368 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.194689657053 0.385218514788 51% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0613547840035 0.0692045440612 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206812445549 0.275328986314 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888763278972 0.0653680567796 136% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.