Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.
Competitions were conducted from the early ages with an intention of promoting athletes and to drive them to excel further. The speaker points out that while some people believe competitions to be an encouragement, it also acts a source of discouragement to the less talented sportsmen. I stand by the policy that competitiveness of these athletes are the drives them to achieve their best.
Every competition has one or the other athlete breaking records. Such a feat is impossible if they do not put in their best. Moreover, these athletes have a goal. They set their aim as higher than the standing record. This nature of athletes to best the past is born out of their competitive nature.
Competitions can also be the place where each athlete realizes one's talent and limits. An athlete who wins the state level competition is motivated to climb higher and compete in the national levels. This requires them to practice harder and push themselves to their best. Similarly, an athlete who fails to perform well in a competition, though dejected, will be able to analyze his setbacks. He is forced to evaluate himself, compare himself with the others, identify his areas of weakness and setup measures to eradicate them. His fail in a competition can be a motivation to perform better in the next competition.
However, excess competitiveness of these athletes can also be harmful. Adoption of malpractices in the field of sports is not uncommon. Match fixations and corruptions involved in sports arise from the competitiveness to excel. Additionally, athletes might even turn to the use of drugs to enhance their performance. This was recently discovered in Russian athletes during the evaluation for the Olympics 2016. Excess pressure from coaches can also hinder the athletes from performing their best.
To sum it all, competitions encourage each athlete to try and keep trying to achieve the best. The fame, glory and appreciation they get from each competition helps them to aim for better in the next competition. However, excess competitive nature can also push them into pits and hinder them from giving their best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'similarly', 'so', 'well', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220779220779 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.166233766234 0.157235817809 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0675324675325 0.0880659088768 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0493506493506 0.0497285424764 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0727272727273 0.0444667217837 164% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.101298701299 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0285714285714 0.0406280797675 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92494409505 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0545454545455 0.030933414821 176% => OK
Particles: 0.0025974025974 0.0016655270985 156% => OK
Determiners: 0.114285714286 0.0997080785238 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0181818181818 0.0249443105267 73% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00779220779221 0.0148568991511 52% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2140.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 350.0 452.878318584 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11428571429 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345714285714 0.366273622748 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271428571429 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205714285714 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12 0.132149295362 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92494409505 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 219.290929204 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534285714286 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 57.6241448757 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.2173913043 23.380412469 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2014760503 59.4972553346 47% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0434782609 141.124799967 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 23.380412469 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.347826086957 0.674092028746 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 42.3602484472 51.4728631049 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.21621621622 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26059089916 0.391690518653 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0763153975703 0.123202303941 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0489233431407 0.077325440228 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.497526404547 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.114879826045 0.149214159877 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926979578068 0.161403998019 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521836843249 0.0892212321368 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.282301202332 0.385218514788 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0344871967906 0.0692045440612 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164763349783 0.275328986314 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311406184015 0.0653680567796 48% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.5995575221 66% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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