Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior
Given issue is concerned about the increasing violence in children and it states two different roots of the same. In the first reason, author states that violence in children is due to increasing violence in media and the other one states it is due to influence of children's peer groups and parental role model .
Although both roots seem to be valid, from my point of view, the second one plays major role for increasing violence in children. Reasoning behind my stand is as follows:
Firstly, it should be clarified that how children are influenced so that root of violence in children can easily be identified. Most of the children have predilection towards observing others and try to copy that to do it exactly same. Thus, it can be said in general that, actions which children do have seen somewhere or from someone. So, violence in chidren is what they have observed from someone to do.
Secondly, children have tendency to watch playful shows on media. They are not inclined towards watching serious shows on media. Moreover, the shows which contains violence are telecast generally after particular time. In addition to that, shows which contain violent actions have also a warning to not to be watched by children or to be watched under the insepection of parents. As for example, movies in India should not be watched by children are given 'A' certificate which states for to be watched by adults only. Thus, these kinds of precautions decrease the possibilities of spreading violence by watching media.
Now, if violence in children is spreading and the effects of media is not powerful enough than it ought to be due to children's peer groups and as well as parental role model. Firstly, I will elaborate my stand that why parental role model is responsible for that. Role model is a personality whom one follows blindly in their ideology and even their actions too. So, parental role model tend to influence the actions of parents. If ideology parental role model is somewhat aggressive or containig violence than parent tend to follow it. By observing those actions, children also try to replicate those actions and thus children learn violent actions. Now, if one child is doing the actions than his peers also observe him/her and try to replicate those actions. Because children do not know the morality of action, they just try to observe the actions and copy those and violence is spread.
In conclusion, it can be said that parental role model and actions of peers play a major role to develope violence in children rather than violence shown in media.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'as for', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in general', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240083507307 0.240241500013 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.198329853862 0.157235817809 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0647181628392 0.0880659088768 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0688935281837 0.0497285424764 139% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0375782881002 0.0444667217837 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129436325678 0.12292977631 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0563674321503 0.0406280797675 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54275690645 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0417536534447 0.030933414821 135% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0563674321503 0.0997080785238 57% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0146137787056 0.0249443105267 59% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0187891440501 0.0148568991511 126% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2655.0 2732.02544248 97% => OK
No of words: 438.0 452.878318584 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06164383562 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351598173516 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294520547945 0.280924506359 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.216894977169 0.200843997647 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0821917808219 0.132149295362 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54275690645 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 219.290929204 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424657534247 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.167099271 55.4138127331 83% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9090909091 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9661062722 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.681818182 141.124799967 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.674092028746 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 49.3611457036 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.39726027397 1.64882698954 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379903638782 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.189026157867 0.123202303941 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.111207035599 0.077325440228 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.548313443976 0.547984918172 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.185070608505 0.149214159877 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150623022754 0.161403998019 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950016999901 0.0892212321368 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.286795220155 0.385218514788 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0687679053952 0.0692045440612 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259003112304 0.275328986314 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960307365714 0.0653680567796 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.4325221239 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.30420353982 264% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 7.22455752212 28% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 10.0 3.66592920354 273% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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