Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role model for the young people who look up to them. in return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
I agree with the statement, that the sports stars and movie stars should be behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. As we know, every young kid has at least one sports star or movie star as his role model. He or she grown up looking at them and thinking of one dream to become like one of them. As they get inspired from these sports stars and movie stars, these sports stars and movie stars should behave good.
As we know the smoking is bad for the health of human being. Also, some movie stars are shown smoking on screen, even at the age of 18 or less. This affects the teenager thinking that, stars can smoke on the screen, then why I cannot smoke. This makes whole teenagers affect. They might get very bad addiction of smoking or drugs. As we know the famous singer and rapper & 15 Grammy award winner Eminem was addicted to the drug in his teenage. This can affect the teenagers badly. On the bright side, Eminem is now free from the drug addiction and get addicted to the music. Therefore, I think sports stars and movie stars should behave properly before the people.
In addition, I think the sports stars and movie stars should think about what they speak in front of the people. As we know the famous tennis star once said that she don't know who is the famous cricketer Sachin Tendulkar. And also the famous bollywood superstar also said that the intolerance in the India is increasing and his wife wants to leave the incredible India with their children. This statements make major controversies in the world of sports and the movie. Therefore, I think they should think twice before they say statements like this.
Therefore, as from above good and bad things of the sports stars and movie stars, we should get those things which are good and we should also think before following them. But, it is their responsibility too that they fulfill the societal responsibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'at least', 'i think', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244736842105 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.144736842105 0.157235817809 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0552631578947 0.0880659088768 63% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0421052631579 0.0497285424764 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0789473684211 0.0444667217837 178% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.121052631579 0.12292977631 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0263157894737 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.21067278087 2.79330140395 79% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0131578947368 0.030933414821 43% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00526315789474 0.0016655270985 316% => OK
Determiners: 0.0973684210526 0.0997080785238 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0289473684211 0.0249443105267 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0131578947368 0.0148568991511 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1918.0 2732.02544248 70% => OK
No of words: 345.0 452.878318584 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55942028986 6.0361032391 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.272463768116 0.366273622748 74% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.124637681159 0.280924506359 44% => More words length more than 6 chars wanted.
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0927536231884 0.200843997647 46% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0666666666667 0.132149295362 50% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21067278087 2.79330140395 79% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 219.290929204 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463768115942 0.48968727796 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.3024395204 55.4138127331 85% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.25 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4097444216 59.4972553346 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9 141.124799967 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 29.7137681159 51.4728631049 58% => OK
Elegance: 1.47524752475 1.64882698954 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.532634681694 0.391690518653 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115893408799 0.123202303941 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.110070753409 0.077325440228 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.486627521269 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153402228696 0.149214159877 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186827669109 0.161403998019 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111666191129 0.0892212321368 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.431085634577 0.385218514788 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0801017752024 0.0692045440612 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37529489503 0.275328986314 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774763864592 0.0653680567796 119% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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