Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid,we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Role models are quite important in everyone's life and many young people do what there role models do, so it is indeed essential for role models to behave well and impose a good picture infront of the people.Now-a-days many young people follow sports stars and movie stars as their role model and it is there societal responsibility that they are expected to fulfill for the millions of dollars they are paid.
Young generation today is quite addicted with hanging out with friends for a movie or watching games of sports together. Every individual have his or her role model as everyone is unique. And many children choose their role models from sports and movies which they watch as it seems fascinating to them that they make huge money or plays well, and acts well. I would like to elaborate the example of Sachin Tendulkar known as Master Blaster and God of Cricket who have set an example for many of youngers in India and outside India, and is known everyone for the game he played. Many youngsters have Sachin Tendulkar as their role model who broke many records and started playing at the age of 16. But once in an interview he said that what his father always taught him was that always be respectful to everyone and be good with your words because after the time you are done with the career in Cricket what everyone would keep in mind is your nature and the way you played. So this the thing which is expected from the stars that would set a remarkable impression on young people.
Another example being the Movie stars who also play an important role for the societal responsibility. But the movies coming in today's world are quite uncensored and few have very bad stories which directly affect on the young individuals. Only the stories which are relevant and provide fun and amuse people and teach them something should be allowed and should contain no censorized things in it.Another example being of movie star Aamir Khan who have done a good impact and work for the society by starting with the programme such as Satyamev Jayate which discusses about the topics which the poor Indian people are facing and it covers various topics which are good for students and can have a impact on their thinking and motivate them for working for a social cause.These is what is to be done from Stars to have a positive impact on the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...se a good picture infront of the people.Now-a-days many young people follow sports stars a...
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...ew have very bad stories which directly affect on the young individuals. Only the stories...
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...ould contain no censorized things in it.Another example being of movie star Aamir Khan ...
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...hich are good for students and can have a impact on their thinking and motivate t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255813953488 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.181395348837 0.157235817809 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0906976744186 0.0880659088768 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0395348837209 0.0497285424764 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0604651162791 0.0444667217837 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.125581395349 0.12292977631 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0488372093023 0.0406280797675 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34339371059 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0162790697674 0.030933414821 53% => OK
Particles: 0.00232558139535 0.0016655270985 140% => OK
Determiners: 0.0767441860465 0.0997080785238 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0139534883721 0.0249443105267 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0372093023256 0.0148568991511 250% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2350.0 2732.02544248 86% => OK
No of words: 416.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64903846154 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.298076923077 0.366273622748 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.192307692308 0.280924506359 68% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.117788461538 0.200843997647 59% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0649038461538 0.132149295362 49% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.34339371059 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483173076923 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.9583280068 55.4138127331 96% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6194690265 53% => OK
Sentence length: 37.8181818182 23.380412469 162% => OK
Sentence length SD: 157.264371822 59.4972553346 264% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 213.636363636 141.124799967 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8181818182 23.380412469 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.674092028746 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.94800884956 61% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 57.048951049 51.4728631049 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.52892561983 1.64882698954 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512392567775 0.391690518653 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126027874149 0.123202303941 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0665697725516 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528035411427 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.232149402043 0.149214159877 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.211104364666 0.161403998019 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114092318093 0.0892212321368 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.460208673348 0.385218514788 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0142574921134 0.0692045440612 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.407222615622 0.275328986314 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497106920637 0.0653680567796 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.5995575221 66% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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