The statement claims cooperation rather than competition to be the more important trait to inculcate in young people in developing them for leadership positions.
The statement claims cooperation rather than competition to be the more important trait to inculcate in young people in developing them for leadership positions. The author tends to disagree with this statement for two major reasons as detailed in the sequel.
First and foremost, the statement is believed to be qutie shallow as it merely focuses on one aspect of leadership, which is the leader’s attitude in dealing with other people. While the question of competition or cooperation is relevant, it is not the only trait to hinge on when it comes to developing people for positions demanding leadership qualities. A leader is expected to have a wide spectrum of traits and skills, among which charisma and emotional intelligence is probably the most substaital. Even if a leader is cooperative, if her/she cannot use emotional appeal to influence the people around him/her, he/she would not be an effective leader. Likewise, if a leader is of a competitive nature, without the ability to buil raport, he/she is bound to fail in the long run.
In addition to the breadth of skills and traits a leader demands, a balance of each of these traits is required for an effective leader. This is because the leader will most likely come across various situations in which application of some traits and skills may or may not be applicable. For example, at times of war, a leader may need to exhibit more competition rather than cooperation in order to protect his/her territory. In other cases, such as a call for a coalition to combat global warming, cooperation may be more apt. Therefore, the leader needs to draw on these traits in each situation in a different fashion and even in different levels of intensity.
Having said that, the author acknoledges some cogency in the claim made above. Agreeable people tend to make more friends than those who are competitive and so this observation may lead many people to believe that leaders need to be affable in order to be effective. However, leadership is an intricate concpet requiring a variety of skills, qualifications, and personality traits and hence cannot be oversimplified as such.
In conclusion, the statement is found to be shallow as it hinges only on one aspect of leadership: cooperation vs. competition. While the author finds some cogency in the opposing worldview, it is ultimately deemed immaterial to cause a shift in the author’s position. Hence, the author disagrees with the claim made in the statement and provides a more-encompassing framework for developing future leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...annot use emotional appeal to influence the people around him/her, he/she would not be an effective l...
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Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different fashion" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... draw on these traits in each situation in a different fashion and even in different levels of intensi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10926365796 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02017671347 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49406175772 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4941514467 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.5 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452727296589 0.243740707755 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150415693499 0.0831039109588 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.217246440324 0.0758088955206 287% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294013646881 0.150359130593 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.209671883698 0.0667264976115 314% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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