Strong beliefs prevent people from thinking clearly about issues
A belief is a set of thoughts held by an individual regarding a particular thing. The beliefs that we hold are a result of our upbringing, surroundings and other influences. The beliefs are deeply rooted in our personalities from childhood and changing them at later stages in life is a challenging task. But these beliefs prevent individuals from thinking outside their minds , and visualize the bigger picture.
We have many examples from history wherein the people strongly believed the Church and its teachings about the sun revolving around the earth. The people blindly followed the teachings of the Church without questioning about the authenticity of its teachings. It was then Galileo opposed this and proved that it’s the earth which revolves round the sun. The people obsequious to their initial beliefs found this hard to accept. They could not open their minds to see the other side of the coin. This in turn led to killing of Galileo for going against the church.
Today we see newspapers flooded with news on rape of young girls and elder women. A woman being raped is socially stigmatized. The woman is considered to be at fault. While blaming the woman, people turn a blind eye towards the real culprit. Rape is a very serious social issue and a solution needs to be found out for addressing it. Instead, people are so busy denigrating the poor lady, that they don’t give attention to the solution to address the issue.
In India, in the olden days there existed sati pratha : a religious practice in which a woman who has been widowed was forced to be burnt on pyre along with her husband. People believed that the woman had no right to live after her husband has died. They never thought about the poor lady who had to die for no particular reason. Though over time, this practice has been banished, such reformations are a result of many years of somebody’s effort to convince the people that it is a unnecessary action.
So I would like to conclude that the deep rooted beliefs can make individuals biased and blind them towards the other possibilities of addressing the issue. They might not believe that there is a different side to the coin and stay in ignorance.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'as for']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220379146919 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.199052132701 0.157235817809 127% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0687203791469 0.0880659088768 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0308056872038 0.0497285424764 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0545023696682 0.0444667217837 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127962085308 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0663507109005 0.0406280797675 163% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62190142493 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0331753554502 0.030933414821 107% => OK
Particles: 0.00236966824645 0.0016655270985 142% => OK
Determiners: 0.125592417062 0.0997080785238 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00947867298578 0.0249443105267 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00947867298578 0.0148568991511 64% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2231.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 381.0 452.878318584 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.85564304462 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320209973753 0.366273622748 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.233595800525 0.280924506359 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.149606299213 0.200843997647 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0971128608924 0.132149295362 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62190142493 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 219.290929204 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55905511811 0.48968727796 114% => OK
Word variations: 63.6584958931 55.4138127331 115% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.3181818182 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7244598383 59.4972553346 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.409090909 141.124799967 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3181818182 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.318181818182 0.674092028746 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 40.6777618707 51.4728631049 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.45833333333 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920803368393 0.391690518653 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107185892524 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0854503280967 0.077325440228 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514879421715 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13236341169 0.149214159877 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375872990317 0.161403998019 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049621890385 0.0892212321368 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311007234981 0.385218514788 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0592201051778 0.0692045440612 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629712601045 0.275328986314 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447093509593 0.0653680567796 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.30420353982 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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