What matters to you. And why?
I still have a vivid memory when I first stepped into one of the most prestigious colleges in Ho Chi Minh City – Foreign Trade University. At that time, I believed accumulating sufficient knowledge and obtaining good skills is a must which can offer me a large window of employment opportunities with expected salaries and other benefits in the future. So, I have to be perfect at those two things. Back then, what really concerned me was how to achieve good grades or what extracurricular I should engage in. After three years, now I reflect on what has been done so far and realize everything is different from what I thought it should have been.
Regarding an ongoing internship, I was exposed to many novelties and inevitable failures due to my rigid performance based on hypothetical groundings. However, after failures come valuable lessons. At first, giving a mechanical response to the assigned tasks had impeded my comprehensibility to the essence value of the job; then, I myself strove to observe and perceive learning attitude or respect towards surroundings plays a pivotal role. From then, I could notice how my working life has changed day by day thanks to my proactive behaviour. Also, more added values are created for myself and other people with my can – do attitude. Therefore, this led to higher efficiency and much faster-paced workplace.
Undeniably, life does not just revolve around studying and practicing – this is what I learned from the 3 – month internship. It is apparent knowledge and skills may support you at some phases, but attitudes promote lifetime improvements. Thus, instead of relying too much on theoretical understandings, I would reckon our rising generation should pay more attention to pragmatic guide. When adopting humble and enthusiastic attitude in academic environment, I could acknowledge how positively my friends were influenced through my consistent making effort. Hence, I wholeheartedly believe this change will be conducive to self – development and community, especially in a workplace where people often label it “stiff competition”.
In this day and age, most enterprises seem to appreciate staff’s attitude rather than their understandings or skills. After the exposure to a practical job, I sincerely consent to this mindset due to its contribution to work values. As a result, I as well as my peers have to figure out how to suit this trend since a minor change in attitude can entail a significant result.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16040316228 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651851851852 0.4932671777 132% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3692627018 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.526315789 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0738104035566 0.243740707755 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.021211149256 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428331265122 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0411247203177 0.150359130593 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439096928721 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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