The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows information about the problems people have when they move to a new country according to various people’s age group.

The greatest problem for the middle age group is related to money at 35 percent. However, only 34 percent of people aged 18-34 years old find hard to organize their money, while twenty-eight percent of people over 55 have this problem.

Thirty-seven percent of the people aged 35-54 have sort out their health the most problematic. In comparison, the middle age and the oldest people are nearly 36 percent have problem to maintain their health.

In contrast to maintain their health, only 3 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble to finding a suitable school for their children. However, the most problematic is near twenty percent of people aged 35-54, while six percent of the youngest people have the similar problems.

In general, all age have different problems, but the percentage of the middle age who want to maintain their healthy is much higher than the other problems.

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the percentage of the middle age who want to maintain their healthy is much higher than the other problems.
the percentage of the middle age who want to maintain their healthy is much higher than the the percentage of other age groups.

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