Internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different.
The what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The Internet is a computer network established by the U.S. Department of Defense in 1969, through a project called ARPANET ARPA (Advanced Research Project Agency Network). Several years later, APARNET has developed significantly and gave big impact to human life. With computer network, everyone connect each other with real time and without border. Some people in the world believe due internet connection, they can do everything fast and easily. Without it they will their life is flat. Vice versa there is some moment cause people perspective to think that dispute to thus opinion. This essay will be argued support and oppose of internet convention for the last thirty years.
Spreading information is quickly today, inhabitants do not need to wait for long time to get update news. With internet connection, citizen can update news with actual time and free. Besides employees in majority company or department can finished their duty nimbly. Electronic high way connection has cause work become simple. However, without it, people can live a normal life, refer to country condition in South Asia, the country have not internet connection, but their citizen can live happily without WWW (World Wide Web), likewise the country is big country with good economic conditions.
There are a lot of online news which people access to get update news with real time and free, they increase their knowledge with keep update about the recent news. People get it real time and free by ARPANET. Internet has cause people change and increasing their knowledge instantly. For example, Japan citizen can know the latest condition in Deutschland by internet. Other than that development industry or company was rising at the last 30 years. Staff of company work fast with help of internet. For illustrate, officer promote product of company in internet and in few hours they stocks have sold out. In this case, I believe that WWW cause people live easy. Without it the conditions would totally different.
There is different case in RRC (Republic of China), resident of china can live happily without Internet. Prime minister of RRC has forbid China Citizens to use internet, but with this condition, RRC could large country with the best economic conditions. Economic growth in China always increased although they have not e-world connection. Besides China people do business with other country without the connection. In this case, I agree that without internet people live would not be different because China citizen can live normally without that.
To put them in nutshell, after analyzing both of views, internet will be important in some counties. On the contrary, residents in other counties can live normally and happily without the connection. It means is depend of habit people in some country.
Vice versa there is some moment cause people perspective to think that dispute to thus opinion.
Vice versa there are some moments which cause people to think and dispute to thus opinion.
Sentence: Besides employees in majority company or department can finished their duty nimbly.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and finished
Sentence: For illustrate, officer promote product of company in internet and in few hours they stocks have sold out.
Description: The fragment officer promote product is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace promote with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to they and stocks
Sentence: In this case, I agree that without internet people live would not be different because China citizen can live normally without that.
Description: A verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to live and would
Sentence: It means is depend of habit people in some country.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and depend
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Getting much better. But still need to work on Grammar.
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