The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the Supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the Supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture presents the two probable sites of new supermarket in Garlsdon. It can be obviously seen that S1 and S2 have different location as well as benefits.

If new Supermarket is located in S1, it would be in the countryside which is near main roads to Hindon whose population is approximately 10,000 people. This location would be most beneficial for countryside dwellers and Hindon citizens which need pass 12 km from Hindon to Garlsdon.

If new supermarket is builts in S2, it would be more strategic because there are industry, housing, and three main roads nearby. S2 is located in the town centre which has three junction to Hindon, Bransdon, and Cransdon in the North-West, South-West, and South-East respectively. Moreover, there are many dwellers live in there.

Uniquely, S1 and S2 are located not far from railway which could make them easier to be accessed.

In conclusion, the picture illustrates the possible locations of new Supermarket in Garlsdon who has 65,000 population.

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Sentence: If new supermarket is builts in S2, it would be more strategic because there are industry, housing, and three main roads nearby.
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