Most of the schools are planning to replace sports and exercise classes with more academic sessions. What i s your opinion on this change? How is this change will affect children’s life in your view?
Due to the technological advancement, many new subjects are being introduced in to the school curriculum every year. In order to cope with this, the schools attempt to organize their timetables with more emphasis on academic work while reducing the time allocated for other activities. However, being aware of the adverse impacts in children’s present and future lives by dropping sports from the school curriculum, I do not agree with this concept.
Sports and exercises are indispensable part in schools. Children today are not even getting enough time to enjoy outdoor games because of lac...
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Sentence: By participating in sports, they learn about the rules in the sports and it help them to watch the live and telecast sports events.
Description: The fragment it help them is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace help with verb, past tense
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