Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion
There are many teenagers when they finish school. Face dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education. While they in fact they can get a job without continue education, but I would argue that is better to go to college or university.
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons it is because in mind of teenagers will be better it they to find a job, but some young people prefer to continue to go to college or university. And with more learning, teenagers will be easy to get a job, and young people who have a job will decide to build own home and build family, after that, same teenagers will continue to find scholarship have more learning to be preferable. It is because teenagers want to success, after getting success about family and earning money.
On the other hand, I believe if the young people always get around find education, definitely career will be good, and beside it teenagers get many experience to be success people. And teenagers can to be a lecturer and increase education in own country. For example teenagers who have much experience can be lecturer the name Carina Lammle, 16 years old and she is from Jerman. She can be like this, it is because she always learning.
In conclusion there are convincing arguments for starting work straight after school, but it will be better if they continue and study in college or university to a successful career.
Sentence: While they in fact they can get a job without continue education, but I would argue that is better to go to college or university.
Description: The tag a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by in
Suggestion: Refer to they and in
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Suggestion: Refer to without and continue
Sentence: The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons it is because in mind of teenagers will be better it they to find a job, but some young people prefer to continue to go to college or university.
Description: The tag a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by to
Suggestion: Refer to they and to
Sentence: On the other hand, I believe if the young people always get around find education, definitely career will be good, and beside it teenagers get many experience to be success people.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace definitely with adjective
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