Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, will all living difficulties, people are paying more attention to benevolent activities. Parent, in particular, wish their children care more about their compatriots while the tendency of donation and giving aid is being improved in them. Therefore, some people believe that the best way to achieve this is to making unpaid community services as a part of mandatory programs in schools. In my view, this is a great flow when it come to practice as it have profound influences in children's social behavior and personality.
First, schools are the most appropriate environments to blossom ...
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will all living difficulties,
Suggestion: with all living difficulties,
Sentence: In my view, this is a great flow when it come to practice as it have profound influences in children's social behavior and personality.
Description: The fragment it come to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace come with verb, past tense
Sentence: As a result, i cared too much in the way of making connection with people and about terms that I choosed to be impressive so that I could persuade them to donate.
Error: choosed Suggestion: No alternate word
choose chose chosen
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