Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Nowadays, people have many characteristics from some aspect such as living place. Mostly, community who has work live at big city and always related with many rules and always run by deadline. On the other hand, pupil who lived at small town has more enjoy live without stress and deadline. Otherwise, for my personality, I prefer to live in village because of several reasons
First of all, I choose to live in hamlet because It has a good society. However, the environment of village is more comfortable than big city. For an ilustration, people who lived there is humble, It is because they are not contaminate with hard live thing in big city. Likewise, they never expecting great live with everything that they should grab.
What the next reason I am going to say is, I am the person who loved green scenery. As we know, green which nature color may makes us comfortable and feel free. So, It will be breath taking providing that I can get benefit from nature around of my environment. For instance, it will keep my healthy because just a little polution, find numerous trees, walk at meadow, and I must get pleasure from clear vision from mountainous area.
On balance, If we need calmness and less our stress from crowded of city. Small town is a good destination which to move in . Despite, you will be jobless but we can get simple job, For example agriculture and animal husbandry which can earn money with our self efforts more than before. Moreover, we can enjoy our life like the fluency of water.
Therefore, if I have opportunity to choose where will I stay. I will choose small town. Because small town has good society, nature environment, and far from crowded of big city.
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Sentence: As we know, green which nature color may makes us comfortable and feel free.
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Sentence: On balance, If we need calmness and less our stress from crowded of city.
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Sentence: Despite, you will be jobless but we can get simple job, For example agriculture and animal husbandry which can earn money with our self efforts more than before.
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Sentence: For an ilustration, people who lived there is humble, It is because they are not contaminate with hard live thing in big city.
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Sentence: For instance, it will keep my healthy because just a little polution, find numerous trees, walk at meadow, and I must get pleasure from clear vision from mountainous area.
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