Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thng.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In this decade people always prefer to spend their lives for some things and some of that ovoiding change. There for the people try to doing some things and make happy for their life, but some of peoples try to another things in order the society could accept them. People in Indonesia to face that problem too, for example some of young people change their style life and fashion to follow western style because they would improve their life style to everybody. Although, many younger see this style just for explorer their life but they did not know if that style could give some negative impact and positive. Mostly the younger people think if every change is always good for them. I would give suggestion if I disagree, because every change is not always good but could give some negative in fact too. I would to give two opinion.
Impact of the style could bring young people in uncontrol freedom, whre young people can not controlling their life from outside in fact.
Government must to give controlling about the product import by some rules in order produsen could make their fashion with culture consideration. And consument
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Well, no serious worries
Well, no serious worries about score you have earned. The more you write, The more you have mistakes. Then, you learn from them.
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Sentence: There for the people try to doing some things and make happy for their life, but some of peoples try to another things in order the society could accept them.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and things
Sentence: Although, many younger see this style just for explorer their life but they did not know if that style could give some negative impact and positive.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to explorer and their
Sentence: In this decade people always prefer to spend their lives for some things and some of that ovoiding change.
Error: ovoiding Suggestion: avoiding
Sentence: Impact of the style could bring young people in uncontrol freedom, whre young people can not controlling their life from outside in fact.
Error: uncontrol Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: whre Suggestion: where
Sentence: Government must to give controlling about the product import by some rules in order produsen could make their fashion with culture consideration.
Error: produsen Suggestion: produced
Sentence: And consument
Error: consument Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 196 350
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Minimum 250 words wanted.
better to have 5 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
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Score: 3.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 196 350
No. of Characters: 923 1500
No. of Different Words: 97 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.742 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.709 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.066 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 35 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.436 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.192 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5