Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, getting job for people becomes a hot issue which they compete to receive much salary. Hence, some people argue that a professional athlete will raise more income than other occupations. In addition, I think a successful football player, such as Christiano Ronaldo will be a good instance to describe how high the earnings per month of sport players earnings. Instead, Ronaldo is used to have enormous houses which spread out in some country around the world.

However, every qualified athlete has to cross “an uphill battle”, it indicates that we have to expand our abilities to face many obstacle such as a high injured possibility. Moreover, sport division has a contemporary season which depend on the sport competition in each country. In addition, the athlete has a limitation period of job contract, it is around ten years. Finally, the athlete has to find another job.

I think business officer is a more efficient occupation which can receive more money fast than the professional athlete. Why? Because, for me the business officer does not depend on skill that we have to improve and it does not need period to begin a company, but it demands to maintain a good relation each other. As a result, the business will produce their profit income every day.

In conclusion, some people may think that professional sports can boost more income than other, Even though, this occupation has advantages and disadvantage that I mentioned. However, occupation does not describe how to earn much money but even it explains us how we can maintain the income until the next generation of us.

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