The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the the world and in different continents.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the the world and in different continents.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the urbanization percentage in the world in 1950 and this with compare the percentage in 2014 and the percentage project in 2030.

Between 1950 and 2030, the percentage in the world increase sharply, growing from 29% to 60%. However, this rate is less marked in some continents than other. The percentage of population people in urban areas in 1950 to 2030 in Asia is from 17% to 54%, in Europe is from 51% to 78%.

For example, the population inhabitant percentage in North America is 64% to 87%, In spite of the growing go up slightly in 1950 to 2030. The lower percentage of population occupy in urban areas is in Africa. The growing is just 15% to 51% than other. Both the countries have a rise steeply also.

It is also clear from the graph that, urbanization in Latin America is projected to be than Europe in 2030.

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Sentence: The bar chart shows the urbanization percentage in the world in 1950 and this with compare the percentage in 2014 and the percentage project in 2030.
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The percentage of population people in urban areas in 1950
The percentage of population in urban areas in 1950

In spite of the growing go up slightly in 1950 to 2030.
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The lower percentage of population occupy in urban areas is in Africa
The lower percentage of population which occupies in urban areas is in Africa

urbanization in Latin America is projected to be than Europe in 2030.
urbanization in Latin America is projected to be more than Europe in 2030.

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