The chart below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.
Both of the charts showing the information of the population of Yemen and Italy on the ages in 2000 and projection of 250. They show the different proportion of population twice country in the same time in percent.
In 2000 the high population numbered of Yemen was 0-14 years group. On 50.1 % out of 100%. Followed by the ages group of 15-59 years on position 46.3%.the smallest was 60+ years group on numbered 3.6%. different experienced by Italy. In Italy the first range was category of 15-59 years with amount 61.6% followed by 60+ years on 24% an 14.3% by category 0-14 years.
On the projectionof 2050 they comparing about Yemen and Italy habitant figures. They have prediction that in 2050 the number of ages 15-59 years will be dominate on 57.3% (increased stightly from the previous period). Then the number of age 0-14 years will be decreasing to 37.0% in that time. The prediction of Italy resident is not really different with Yemen. Which the big rate is showing by 15-59 years on 46.3%. the scor followed by 60+ years of age on 42.3%.
The summary is almost all of the chart period is more prominent by 15-59 years group than the other. And the lowest category in all period is 0-14 years.
Both of the charts showing the information of the population of Yemen and Italy on the ages in 2000 and projection of 250.
Both charts are showing the information of the population of Yemen and Italy on the ages in 2000 and projection of 250.
population twice country
population in two countries
will be dominate on 57.3%
will dominate on 57.3%
The summary is almost all of the chart period is more prominent by 15-59 years group
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: Followed by the ages group of 15-59 years on position 46.3.the smallest was 60 years group on numbered 3.6. different experienced by Italy.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to ages and group
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to years and group
Sentence: On the projectionof 2050 they comparing about Yemen and Italy habitant figures.
Description: A noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to Italy and habitant
Sentence: The summary is almost all of the chart period is more prominent by 15-59 years group than the other.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to years and group
Sentence: On the projectionof 2050 they comparing about Yemen and Italy habitant figures.
Error: projectionof Suggestion: projection
Error: habitant Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: They have prediction that in 2050 the number of ages 15-59 years will be dominate on 57.3 increased stightly from the previous period.
Error: stightly Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Which the big rate is showing by 15-59 years on 46.3. the scor followed by 60 years of age on 42.3.
Error: scor Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 10
No. of Words: 215 200
No. of Characters: 955 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.829 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.442 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.334 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 48 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.135 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.231 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4