The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

A comparison the proportion the number of three different thing in global sales in 2000 to 2003. A 3-year period is presented in the bar chart. Overall, the number of buyers for Games software and DVD/Video had increased noticeably, while CD sales were a steady decrease. The CD had the highest the number of sales.

2000 to 2003 saw the highest number of the CD sales although it has a gradual decrease to 35$bn. In the same time, the figure showed that the people who bought the DVD/ Video had increased significantly from below 20 to 30$bn. Apparently, there was a gradual rise in the number of Games software’s sales over the following three years in approximately 20$bn.

Interestingly, while the figure for Games software and DVD sales was a steady rise to almost 5$ respectively, it happened reverse that the number of CD sales had a slight fall to approximately 30$bn by 2000 to 2001. There was the same condition for global sales. 2002 to 2003 experienced a remain constant in the CD sales since the beginning, while the number of buyers for DVD and games software grew steadily.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... comparison the proportion the number of three different thing in global sales in...
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Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'thing' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'things'.
Suggestion: things
...oportion the number of three different thing in global sales in 2000 to 2003. A 3-ye...
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Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$5'.
Suggestion: $5
...d DVD sales was a steady rise to almost 5$ respectively, it happened reverse that ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... global sales. 2002 to 2003 experienced a remain constant in the CD sales since the begi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['apparently', 'if', 'so', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.264423076923 0.268076937826 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.0913461538462 0.116061578633 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0769230769231 0.0759168565197 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432692307692 0.0366838410393 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00961538461538 0.0131127313244 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.139423076923 0.155750635184 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0144230769231 0.0379272487307 38% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.75118206778 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0384615384615 0.0210936926555 182% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.139423076923 0.0948980150116 147% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00480769230769 0.00967000014798 50% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1087.0 1161.00487805 94% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.9 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72105263158 5.90752243213 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73763899035 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.315789473684 0.337110787985 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.178947368421 0.247514529752 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.152631578947 0.171178102325 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110526315789 0.112407865282 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75118206778 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.546246751206 89% => OK
Word variations: 40.5287424902 49.3433353143 82% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 8.93414634146 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0094962315 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0733785842 42.9750493124 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.7 135.714022679 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.0094962315 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.689975730869 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.48048780488 270% => OK
Readability: 36.8947368421 47.7609492067 77% => OK
Elegance: 2.9 2.94281807926 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344591218489 0.418131533498 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.1898175008 0.181151798455 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.111678194859 0.0850326197045 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.652917949439 0.706616315825 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122867948054 0.157042692854 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189205588901 0.228904883108 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561190425187 0.108899403657 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.606946228977 0.367819155151 165% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0355042562854 0.0812612215331 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288719626453 0.316326947829 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330156913894 0.0921553760075 36% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70731707317 216% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.08536585366 49% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 3.16585365854 253% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 7.1512195122 126% => OK

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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