The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

The graph compares the transaction about global sells of games software, DVD/video, and CDs between 2000 and 2003. Overall, the percentage of CDs declined in all three products over the time period.

The bar chart reveals that CDs as higher sales than others. Since 2000, the transaction fell sharply from 35$ to 32$ in the next three years. A DVD/video became the second of highest percentage. However, its trade had almost twice increased in the end of this period. In addition, a games software had increased gradually to almost 20$ in 2003. While the DVD/video and games software were increase, a CDs dropped.

While the games software had increased steadily of around 2$, a DVD/video had climbed of approximately 3$. However, a CDs was plunged to 33$ from 2000 to 2001. In a following year, while a DVD/video was increase gradually, a games software had increased to 18$ in 2003. But, a CDs had fell sharply of 1$ for the remainder of the period.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...od. The bar chart reveals that CDs as higher sales than others. Since 2000, th...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$35'.
Suggestion: $35
...2000, the transaction fell sharply from 35$ to 32$ in the next three years. A DVD/v...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$32'.
Suggestion: $32
...he transaction fell sharply from 35$ to 32$ in the next three years. A DVD/video be...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the highest'.
Suggestion: of the highest
...ee years. A DVD/video became the second of highest percentage. However, its trade had almo...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
... the end of this period. In addition, a games software had increased gradually to alm...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$20'.
Suggestion: $20
...tware had increased gradually to almost 20$ in 2003. While the DVD/video and games ...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... software were increase, a CDs dropped. While the games software had increased s...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
...crease, a CDs dropped. While the games software had increased steadily of arou...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$2'.
Suggestion: $2
...ftware had increased steadily of around 2$, a DVD/video had climbed of approximate...
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Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$3'.
Suggestion: $3
... DVD/video had climbed of approximately 3$. However, a CDs was plunged to 33$ from...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$33'.
Suggestion: $33
...ately 3$. However, a CDs was plunged to 33$ from 2000 to 2001. In a following year,...
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Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
...e a DVD/video was increase gradually, a games software had increased to 18$ in 2003. ...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$18'.
Suggestion: $18
...ally, a games software had increased to 18$ in 2003. But, a CDs had fell sharply of...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$1'.
Suggestion: $1
...in 2003. But, a CDs had fell sharply of 1$ for the remainder of the period. ...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of 1$ for the remainder of the period.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224489795918 0.268076937826 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.117346938776 0.116061578633 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0255102040816 0.0759168565197 34% => Some adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0561224489796 0.0366838410393 153% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00510204081633 0.0131127313244 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142857142857 0.155750635184 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0357142857143 0.0379272487307 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.65604604756 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0255102040816 0.0210936926555 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.122448979592 0.0948980150116 129% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00510204081633 0.00967000014798 53% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 972.0 1161.00487805 84% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.9 83% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92682926829 5.90752243213 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73763899035 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323170731707 0.337110787985 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274390243902 0.247514529752 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207317073171 0.171178102325 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128048780488 0.112407865282 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65604604756 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530487804878 0.546246751206 97% => OK
Word variations: 43.5259347741 49.3433353143 88% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 8.93414634146 134% => OK
Sentence length: 13.6666666667 23.0094962315 59% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.1499586435 42.9750493124 47% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 135.714022679 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 23.0094962315 59% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.689975730869 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 1.48048780488 1013% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.1056910569 47.7609492067 86% => OK
Elegance: 2.25714285714 2.94281807926 77% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407640910974 0.418131533498 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116514019066 0.181151798455 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0952183459289 0.0850326197045 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.513395755804 0.706616315825 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130497033644 0.157042692854 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184796564487 0.228904883108 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124073657561 0.108899403657 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.534186796803 0.367819155151 145% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0444401612547 0.0812612215331 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332310808133 0.316326947829 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636524123511 0.0921553760075 69% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70731707317 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.08536585366 171% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.16585365854 158% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 3.02926829268 198% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 7.1512195122 154% => OK

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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