The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given column graph illustrates the percentage of elderly people in the United Kingdom where the aging population is expected to climb up by the year 2035 starting from 1985.
A closer look at the graph reveals that Wales had the highest population of old people in the year 1985 where England stood in second position by a minor decline of 1 percentage being 15.Although, Scotland had more elderly people in compassion to Northern Ireland being at the least of 14 percentage.
However,over a half a century period all the elderly population of UK is expected to increase dramatically where Wales soared up with a peak of 26 percentage being the dominant city,where as Scotland stood second by 25 percentage.Nonetheless, England and Northern Ireland were on a similar trend consisting 23 percentage each.
All in all,the aging population of UK is expected to increase consistently by having huge percentage of difference in over 50 year time period.
where England stood in second position
where England stood in the second position
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