The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
These pie charts show information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also projections for 2050. The charts explain about three kind of ages that occured in both countries.
Specifically, we can see that group 0-14 years was leaded with 50,1% in 2000. The group 15-59 years occupied the second place with 46,3% in the same year with the first group. The group which has the lowest percentage was group 60+ years with 3,6% in 2000. All of that number occured in Yemen. Still in the same year, we turning to Itally. Group 15-59 years was in the first place with 61,6%. The second place was occupied by group 60+ years and followed by group 0-14 years with 14,3%.
The chart also project the percentage for 2050. It can be seen that group 15-59 years will prominent and be the highest amount also with 57,3%. And the group 0-14 years is close behind with 37,0%. Group 60+ years in Yemen is predicted will steadily increase from3,6% to 5,7%. In the other side, group 15-59 years in Itally will downward up to 46,2%, all at once become the group with the most of percentage in 2050. The second place is group 60+ years with 42,3%, rose slightly from 2000. And the smallest percentage is group 0-14 years with 11,5%.
The overall of chart elucidates that the group 15-59 years is more prominent than the other groups.
three kind of ages that occured
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we can see that group 0-14 years was leaded with 50,1% in 2000
we can see that the group 0-14 years was led with 50,1% in 2000
we turning to Itally.
we are turning to Italy.
we turn to Italy.
Sentence: It can be seen that group 15-59 years will prominent and be the highest amount also with 57,3.
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will downward
will be downward
The second place is group 60+ years with 42,3%, rose slightly from 2000.
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Sentence: The charts explain about three kind of ages that occured in both countries.
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Sentence: All of that number occured in Yemen.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 242 200
No. of Characters: 1055 1000
No. of Different Words: 107 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.944 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.36 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.008 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 42 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 28 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 21 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.105 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4