The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram gives information about the site of a school in 2004 and plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
In 2004, there were 600 students that registered. The school only had one sport field, two buildings and one car park. There were a few of plants and the access to school only from main entrance.
In 2024, the school plans to build a school building in sport field. The school will build a bridge to connect school building 1 and school building 2. The school also will build a road that pass school building 2 toward new car park 2. So, the entrance will not only from main entrance. Sports field will be moved to right side of the new road in the school. It will be looked greener because the number of tree will be increased.
Generally, if the plans accomplished in 2014, the school will greener, the car park will be increased, and the building will be rise.
there were 600 students that registered
there were 600 registered students
if the plans accomplished in 2014
if the plans are accomplished in 2014
the school will greener
the school will be greener
and the building will be rise.
and the building will be rising.
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