The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate the steps of two different productions. The productions are cement production and concrete production. The cement production has long steps process with many tools while the concrete production has only need one directly process with four different materials.
The first step in cement production, limestone and clay are put on crusher to make powder. After that, powder is put into mixer and the into rotating heater for some time. It is not finish step because the material form rotating heating has to grind to become cement. And, it is ready to pack in bags.
For concrete production, it needs 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and 50% gravel. All materials are put into mixer machine to make concrete after the rotating.
To sum up, the pictures give information that the process of cement production need heating process to make cement. In fact, cement production and concrete production need natural resources as raw materials in each process
The cement production has long steps process with many tools while the concrete production has only need one directly process with four different materials.
The cement production has more steps in process with many tools while the concrete production has only one direct process with four different materials.
and the into rotating heater for some time.
and put into rotating heater for some time.
It is not finish step
It is not a finished step
the process of cement production need heating process
the process of cement production needs heating process
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