The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections untill 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The chart indicates that the big differential occured among petrol and oil, coal and natural gas and the others kind below. In the period of 1980 untill 2015, petrol and oil gas led and will be predict up to 50 quadrillion units in 2030. Natural gas began with 20 quadrillion units in 1980 and rose slightly in 2030 with around 24 quadrillion units. Coal experienced a big changes from around 17 quadrillion units in 1980 and will become extinct with around 30 quadrillion in 2030. On other side, nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower began by same amount with around 4 quadrillion in 1980. Nuclear experienced adequate increased during 1980 untill 2030. Solar/wind almost unchanged because their increasing about 2 quadrillion units up to around 6 quadrillion units. Otherwise, hydropower is predicted will get stuck in 2030 with about 4 quadrillion units.
In conclusion, there are some extremelly differentials among few sector of energy over this fifty years period.
about consumption of energy
about the consumption of energy
Sentence: The chart indicates that the big differential occured among petrol and oil, coal and natural gas and the others kind below.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and kind
and will be predict up to 50 quadrillion
and will be predicted up to 50 quadrillion
Nuclear experienced adequate increased
Nuclear experienced adequate increase
Solar/wind almost unchanged because their increasing about 2 quadrillion
Solar/wind is almost unchanged because their increase is about 2 quadrillion
Sentence: In conclusion, there are some extremelly differentials among few sector of energy over this fifty years period.
Description: The fragment some extremelly differentials is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace extremelly with adjective
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to years and period
Sentence: The chart indicates that the big differential occured among petrol and oil, coal and natural gas and the others kind below.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In the period of 1980 untill 2015, petrol and oil gas led and will be predict up to 50 quadrillion units in 2030.
Error: untill Suggestion: until
Sentence: Nuclear experienced adequate increased during 1980 untill 2030.
Error: untill Suggestion: until
Sentence: In conclusion, there are some extremelly differentials among few sector of energy over this fifty years period.
Error: extremelly Suggestion: extremely
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
Read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 180 200
No. of Characters: 897 1000
No. of Different Words: 104 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.663 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 37 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.219 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.462 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4