The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown

Essay topics:

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The bar graph gives information about the free time activities of Australian boys and girls between the ages of 5-14 years.
Overall, the most extra ordinary among the adolescents was watching television or videos and the least preferred was the skateboarding or rollerblading.
According to the graph, randomly some of boys and girls were asked of their hobbies so most of them were fascinated in watching television or video. Furthermore, round about 75% to 81% of boys had favored the bike riding and electronics or computer games in contrast the girls were less interested in these activities as compared to the boys which was almost 58 percent and 60 percent respectively. Arts and crafts were most famous among the Australian girls which were approximately 10% more than the ratio of boys. Among the kids rollerblading was the lest cherished spare time activity but still this activity was mesmerized to boys which was 40% and this activity was also not well-known in girls free time(22%).

Votes
Average: 7 (14 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the boys') or simply say ''some boys''.
Suggestion: some of the boys; some boys
...ding. According to the graph, randomly some of boys and girls were asked of their hobbies s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s the lest cherished spare time activity but still this activity was mesmerized t...
^^
Line 3, column 692, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd this activity was also not well-known in girls free time22%.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, still, well, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08536585366 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83016175968 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0748183815 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.23603664747 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121052987683 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722751957359 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840157057907 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116963691452 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101449718276 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the boys') or simply say ''some boys''.
Suggestion: some of the boys; some boys
...ding. According to the graph, randomly some of boys and girls were asked of their hobbies s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s the lest cherished spare time activity but still this activity was mesmerized t...
^^
Line 3, column 692, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd this activity was also not well-known in girls free time22%.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, still, well, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08536585366 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83016175968 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0748183815 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.23603664747 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121052987683 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722751957359 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840157057907 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116963691452 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101449718276 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.