The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age.
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There are three graphs and they presents that Britian people purchased three types of music albums according to gender and age.it can be easily seen from the graphs that 25-34 years old British buy music albums very much compared with others.They buy pop music albums mostly in approximately 33 %.
Classical music is bought more by older people who are 45 years old or over.İts percentage is 21 %.in contrast of older people 25-34 years old young people buy classical music albums in 3 %.Older British people are not interesting in pop and rock music.Their proportion of 10 % buy rock and pop music albums.35-44 years old people buy rock music albums in 25 %.
İn point of genders both of males and famales buy pop music albums mostly.each gender gets classical music albums in 8% and 7%. Generally classical music albums are not bought very much by British population.Young people are not interesting in classical music.
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Sentence: ?n point of genders both of males and famales buy pop music albums mostly.each gender gets classical music albums in 8 and 7.
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