IELTS Cambridge 8 test 3
The map shows about a town of Garldsdon. There is a new supermaket is planned for the town and there are two possible sites for the supermaket. The first place is an countryside area, approximately 12 km from the town centre and this area has a public transportation of railway across from the other countriside, Cransdon and the town centre in its southeast area. The first place is located in the north of Bransdon are, the place whose population is amount 15000 people. Number one of the supermaket place is going to be is lies on the westeast area from the center of Garlsdon.
The second place for the supermaket will take place to town center, exactly in the middle of two big industries area of Garldsdon town. There are three main roads passed by this location, first is to reach the hindon from cransdon, 16 km from bransdon. The second location also can be reach by the railway transportation that has the route from hindon to cransdon. The more strategic place for the supermaket is the second place than the first one because the second one is in the middle of the town centre and can easily be connected with crowded people especially because is lies in the south of housing area and in the middle of two industries.
that's all my report
There is a new supermaket is planned for the town
There is a new supermarket which is planned for the town
Number one of the supermaket place is going to be is lies on the westeast area from the center of Garlsdon.
Number one of the supermaket place is going to be on the west east area from the center of Garlsdon.
The second location also can be reach by the railway transportation
The second location also can be reached by the railway transportation
because is lies in the south of housing area and in the middle of two industries.
because it lies in the south of housing area and in the middle of two industries.
Sentence: The second place for the supermaket will take place to town center, exactly in the middle of two big industries area of Garldsdon town.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to industries and area
Sentence: There is a new supermaket is planned for the town and there are two possible sites for the supermaket.
Error: supermaket Suggestion: supermarket
Sentence: The first place is an countryside area, approximately 12 km from the town centre and this area has a public transportation of railway across from the other countriside, Cransdon and the town centre in its southeast area.
Error: countriside Suggestion: countryside
Sentence: Number one of the supermaket place is going to be is lies on the westeast area from the center of Garlsdon.
Error: supermaket Suggestion: supermarket
Sentence: The second place for the supermaket will take place to town center, exactly in the middle of two big industries area of Garldsdon town.
Error: supermaket Suggestion: supermarket
Sentence: The more strategic place for the supermaket is the second place than the first one because the second one is in the middle of the town centre and can easily be connected with crowded people especially because is lies in the south of housing area and in the middle of two industries.
Error: supermaket Suggestion: supermarket
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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No. of Words: 224 200
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 224 200
No. of Characters: 1011 1000
No. of Different Words: 98 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.869 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.513 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.491 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.948 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4