The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The graph shows the number of visitors who visit 3 museums in London between June and September 2013.
In summer 2013, most visitors went to British Museum . Science Museum and Natural History Museum received fewer visitor than British Museum . By contrast, On july British Museum has the highest number of visitor.The number fluctuated between 500 and 750 thousand. The lowest number of visitors was on August with 300 thousand visitor in Science Museum. The number of visitors who went to Science Museum dropped gradually from 400 to 300 thousand from june to August. Then it incresased significantly from August to September (30 to 450). The highest number visitor of Natural History museum happen on June with 550 visitor. The fluctuated number of Natural History museum on July to August was remained stable with 380 visitors. Then it increased steadly in September.
In conclusion, British Museum was the most favorite place to visit during June toSeptember 2013.
between June and September 2013.
between June and September in 2013.
Sentence: The highest number visitor of Natural History museum happen on June with 550 visitor.
Description: The fragment museum happen on is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace happen with verb, past participle
Sentence: Then it incresased significantly from August to September 30 to 450.
Error: incresased Suggestion: increased
Sentence: Then it increased steadly in September.
Error: steadly Suggestion: steady
Sentence: In conclusion, British Museum was the most favorite place to visit during June toSeptember 2013.
Error: toSeptember Suggestion: to September
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