The line chart compares thefts per 1000 vehicles in four different countries (Great Britain, Sweden, France, Canada) from 1990 to 1999. It is clear that The United Kingdom was the nation with the highest number of thefts during the period and there was a downward trend except for the Sweden’s trend.
The number of thefts in Great Britain fluctuated wildly which ultimately reached nearly 15 cars in 1999 from 18 cars in 1990. Similar pattern was found for France’s figure which started from almost 10 thefts per 1000 vehicles in 1990 to only 6 thefts in 1999. Although Canada’s figure showed a downward trend from 1990 to 1999, it dropped slightly from 8 thefts in 1991 to 5 thefts in 1993 and then it gradually increased to 6 thefts in 1999.
Different from the other three countries, The number of car stolen increased dramatically from only 6 thefts in 1990 to 14 thefts in 1999. This significant increase shifted Sweden as country with the least number of thefts from the bottom to the second country with the highest number of thefts after The UK.
shifted Sweden as country
shifted Sweden as the country
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Need to compare and contrast by the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Don't just go details like:
'The number of thefts in Great Britain fluctuated wildly which ultimately reached nearly 15 cars in 1999 from 18 cars in 1990. Similar pattern was found for France’s figure which started from almost 10 thefts per 1000 vehicles in 1990 to only 6 thefts in 1999. Although Canada’s figure showed a downward trend from 1990 to 1999, it dropped slightly from 8 thefts in 1991 to 5 thefts in 1993 and then it gradually increased to 6 thefts in 1999. '
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