MALE AND FEMALE FITNESS MEMBERSHIP BETWEEN 1970 AND 2000
The bar chart reveals the proportion of fitness membership for a period of thirty years, between 1970 and 2000. Generally, the number of men and women who were registered as fitness members time by time had a fluctuation.
In 1970, the number of female fitness membership was very low which only 1000. However, it grew for 100 percent in the following five years. Despite it decreased slightly in 1980, it climbed again in the next five years to almost 3000. After declining to just above 2000, it inclined to the same number with ten years before it. In 2000, its number decreased for around 25 percent to 2000.
Simultaneously, the amount of male was also increased 100 percent from 1970 to 1975. However, in those five years, it was 100 percent higher than women as well. In 1980, its number fell to around 1500 and continued fell to just under 2000 in 1985, but increased slightly in 1990 to just above 2000. There was a dramatic rise 1995. The number was 5000. However, it fell sharply to 1000 in 2000.
Overall, the total of male fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 was higher than female fitness membership.
the number of female fitness membership was very low which only 1000
the number of female fitness membership is only 1000 which was very low
Despite it decreased slightly in 1980,
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it inclined to the same number with ten years before it.
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There was a dramatic rise 1995.
There was a dramatic rise in 1995.
the total of male fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 was higher than female fitness membership.
the total number of male fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 was higher than that of female fitness membership.
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