The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table provide statistical data about the underground railway systems in four continents which are United Kingdom, Europe, Asia, and America. The datas explain about date opened, kilometres of route and passengers per year (in million).

London is the oldest one opened the subways and has longest route distance. The shortest lang of track is 11 km in Tokyo railways system. It is one fourteen with lang of track in London. Between that, Washington DC and Los Angeles establish has 28 routes and 50 whereas Washington DC opened in 1976 as 126 lang of tracks and 144 million costumers per year. On the other hand, Paris was open in 1990 nearest 200 millions travellers per year and near 200 kilometres lang of trail.

In the nutshell, there is no connection date opened, route distance and commuters per year in the six cities. It is a statistical data about the underground railways systems in the six cities.

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The table provide statistical data
The table provides statistical data

London is the oldest one opened the subways and has longest route distance.
London is the oldest one which opened the subways and has the longest route distance.

It is one fourteen with lang of track in London.
The length of track is one fourteenth of that in London.

Washington DC and Los Angeles establish has 28 routes and 50
Washington DC and Los Angeles have 28 and 50 routes respectively

there is no connection date opened, route distance and commuters per year in the six cities
there is no connection among date opened, route distance and commuters per year in the six cities

Sentence: The shortest lang of track is 11 km in Tokyo railways system.
Error: lang Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: It is one fourteen with lang of track in London.
Error: lang Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Between that, Washington DC and Los Angeles establish has 28 routes and 50 whereas Washington DC opened in 1976 as 126 lang of tracks and 144 million costumers per year.
Error: lang Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: On the other hand, Paris was open in 1990 nearest 200 millions travellers per year and near 200 kilometres lang of trail.
Error: lang Suggestion: No alternate word

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 3.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 156 200
No. of Characters: 737 1000
No. of Different Words: 90 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.534 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.724 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 52 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.925 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.222 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4