The table below shows the costumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The table provides the statistical data about percentage of households such as central heating, television, video, vacuum cleaner, refrigerator, washing machine, dishwasher and telephone in Britain in 1972-1983 period. The most prominent features is television which was most popular to use for people in Britain contrast with dishwasher in percentage of households.
Video is newest households in Britain. It started in 1983 with 18 percentage of households. But, it was higher percentage than dishwasher while dishwasher started faster than video. It was 5% in 1983. Television increased around 1% for each years. Whereas, washing machine rose slightly, either. Central heating and telephone increase significantly for each year. In according to it, vacuum cleaner changed dramatically. It had no people use the vacuum cleaner in 1983 while vacuum cleaner was second higher after television in 1983.
To sum up, the given data indicate that the costumer durables owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983 increase slightly in year by year and people had been started to do activity by electronic machine or technology.
Video is newest households in Britain
Video is the newest household in Britain
it was higher percentage than dishwasher
it has higher percentage than dishwasher
Whereas, washing machine rose slightly, either.
Whereas, washing machine rose slightly, too.
It had no people use the vacuum cleaner in 1983
It had no people using the vacuum cleaner in 1983
the given data indicate that
the given data indicates that
Sentence: Television increased around 1 for each years.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and years
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 172 200
No. of Characters: 915 1000
No. of Different Words: 94 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.621 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.32 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.844 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.497 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4