the table below shows how young people in Tokyo and Japan listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company's international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music

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the table below shows how young people in Tokyo and Japan listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company's international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music

The table compares the data about how young boys and girls listen to music in recent days, in Tokyo and Japan. The pie chart estimates people’s opinion which is recorded in company’s international findings about live and recorded music.

It can be obviously seen that a massive 75 percent male gender are interested in MP3-players, whereas females listen to music in CDs at around 22 percent. On the contrary, young girls are more interested in live music at around 44 percent. The proportion of Internet in both men and women is identical, at 55 and 42 percent accordingly.

Turning to the pie chart, we can see that a vast majority of people prefer live music at 70 percent, while those who answered do not know is just 4 percent.

To sum up, males spend more time to listen to music rather than their counter parts. A tiny minority of people prefer recorded music.

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